I could write a poem about you,
And I could exaggerate every lie you told.
I can make you be the bad guy,
Because your lies are getting old.
I’m so sick of this and that,
And how you have abandoned me.
After everything we went through,
After every silent plea.
I can’t understand it,
Why you’d want to make this hurt.
I feel so very desperate,
When you brush me off like dirt.
Please put things into simpler terms,
What is it that I lack?
Please don’t misunderstand me because,
I’d never take you back.
You've hit me where it hurts,
my heart is where you've struck.
I hope I never see you again,
But that’s just my rotten luck.
Author notes
I was trying to get the point across that she wasn't asking for him back, that all she wanted was to know what had gone wrong; but I'm not sure I portrayed that right.
(((((Option one, LOST LOVE.)))))
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Comments
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This is an awesome poem. I sorta know what this is like. But I was dumping a guy. LOL Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Indeed, you have
well done, I would say though a couple typo errors would need correction, lol but the piece is amazingly written, Good luck in the contest
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I think you portrayed it exactly how you intendid.
What I hear her saying is that she want's to know why he felt it necessary to treat her the way he did, to cause her to hurt and because of his callouseness she wouldn't take him back.
It's a perfect example of love.
You may want it to end but it doesn't mean it's easy.
I don't know maybe I'm wrong but that's what I got out of it.
The only thing I would change is the last two stanza, they kinda take away from the rest of the poem.
All together a great poem.
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