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If You Are Not the One

If you are not the one
then why do I die for you everyday?
If you have no meaning to me
then why do I feel suffocated?
Why do I feel breathless?
when I do not hear your voice.
If you are not the one
then why can't I imagine
a life without you. 
If you are not the one
then why am I passing
the endless road towards you.
The road which is full of thorns
and my feet bleeds.
Even then I will continue walking.
Will you still think that you are not the one?


Author notes

This poem is inspired by the title of the song called "If You're Not The One" by Daniel Bedingfield.This song was the prompt of the contest. Personally I did not listen the song.

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  • Sf
    February 8, 2008
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    This is great!!!!!


  • WinE-reDpuddles
    November 8, 2007

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    i like this poem. its nice. i know this feeling...the poem truly fits... into a persons life that i know of very well..

  • a u r a
    November 8, 2007

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    moving

    I wonder if you penned this piece with the same ease as I read it with -your poem has this charming ability to make the reader believe in all that the inner self has always believed -the simplicity of language adds to the beauty of this poem-each and every line has a depth that touches the heart-I have simply loved this poem -thank you for sharing it with us


  • Kram
    November 8, 2007

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    keep it up

    Even then I will continue walking.
    Will you still think that you are not the one?

    really nice lines ....keep it up

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 23, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry, Josephine

  • Leaving Today
    October 21, 2007
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    good one, liked reading it. it will be better after editing the little mistakes i guess.


  • Beating gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    There's a few thing in this that I would edit. In the line:
    "then why do I am feel suffocated?"
    It should be:
    "then why do I feel suffocated"

    This line:
    "Then why can not I imagine"
    It should be either:
    "Then why can't I imagine"
    or
    "then why can I not imagine"

    "then why I am passing "
    Should be
    "then why am I passing"

    And in the ending line:
    "Will you still think that you are not one?"
    It should be:
    "Will you still think that you are not the one?"

    Quite a few mistakes, mostly just the stupid ones that we all make. Other than that, I think this piece is really sweet. I can see where you found your inspiration, and you got the best things from love written out. Great job!

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