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paranoid

paranoid-



    i twitch and turn everytime i hear your voice.
but its not your voice-

      just noise, my mind absorbs and morphs
                    into your desperate call


[this makes no sense at all]
you're DEAD.




but my mind cant seem to convince
my heart-

and my heart is surrounded by a wall of glass
and this wall wont fall until He returns
to open me up and heal this heart of stone.



im not lost, im just alone.

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  • leander Moderators member
    October 20, 2007

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    I really like the atmosphere you created within the lines of this poem although it's quite a sad subject you've written about

    The flow of this is great and really fits the train of thoughts you expressed

    Well done!
    Leander


  • Doll Faise
    October 20, 2007

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    Really great poem. I love the idea. The begining of the poem didn't flow all too well. The poem was still really fantastic as a whole though. It really speaks to me.