I come creeping up your spine
Like the breath of a ghost
And ride on the waves of your
Sleeping brain
For hundreds of years
I have hid from the sight
Of your flat wall eyes
That you shared with the world
But today I am picked
Like a flea from a hair
From my dark little refuge
And into the light
I burn from the brightness
And shrivel away
In your latex gloved hand
And you scream, and you scream,
And you scream.
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this was very good i like it you have a wonderful poem herejust one question how did you come up with it great job on the trophy keep that pen flowing and i hope to read more of your poems
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Weird, but nice.
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Very creepy and nightmare inducing!! Well done and best of luck in the contest
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I come creeping up your spine
Like the breath of a ghost
And ride on the waves of your
Sleeping brain.
What a marvelous introduction to a nightmare .
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well done
You creeped me out with this poem, which I think means that you wrote it very well. It is indeed intense and I could be wrong, but it makes me think of either the devil for a deeper type of meaning or some type of leech. Very unique and different. -
I like the first verse...great imagination within it...and it kept going till the end. I like the repeating of scream in the end, well done, thanks for sharing
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Wonderful!
This is an intense poem. Great write. I would try to use more puntuation.
"I come creeping up your spine,
Like the breath of a ghost,'
And ride on the waves of your
sleeping brain."
Keep up the great work. I enjoyed it alot.
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