Once, I found the light at the end of the tunnel.
I rather enjoyed its warmth and glow,
A place of butterfly air and honey comb rocks.
I enjoyed peppermint kisses, and teddy bear hugs.
But, looking back I could see you in the shadows.
Apparently I better enjoy walking through this Hell,
A place of desperation and smoke-ringed views.
Do people really climb back into the tunnel?
I do.
It is a funny thing, this is where I find hope.
Here is where I can feel.
I can run my fingers down rigid cold walls,
And I know I'm alive.
I can still feel a hint of warmth on my neck,
But I don't think it is from the sun.
Your breath runs chills down my spine.
Why bask in the light?
I have such a journey to explore here with you.
Here in the darkness.
Author notes
This picture immediately reminded me of how I seem to prefer what is "wrong" for me to pure happiness. As humans we aren't always attracted to the attractive life. It is okay to admit even what is "bad" for us is alluring.
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- Fourth Image by PhoenixFox.
700 points, ended November 6, 2007, 11 entries
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I liked the imagery. It was sad, but I'm sure a lot of people can relate to wanting what's "wrong" for them, rather than what may make them happy. Maybe because in a way, what's wrong makes you happy in a way. Anyways. Great write. Keep it up.
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this is really good as well
i like it congrats
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It´ s a good thing
Intersting feelings
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There is a saying that "nice guys finish last". This is often the case because there is little danger in "nice guys" and most of us crave a bit of excitement. This is why scary movies do so well at the box office. We like the adrenaline rush that the "wrong" things give us. We are intrigued by witches and goblins and devils. Halloween is the biggest holiday in the US, second only to Christmas. But I digress...
I found your poem a bit hard to follow when I first read it. I had difficulty in your transition from one end of the tunnel to looking back in L6. Your notes helped on the second time through however. Once I knew what it was about, I could appreciate it more. I liked your underlying theme and the images you painted. Thanks for entering!
~Phoenix
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OOOH! Wow, this is wonderful. I love the ideas, the imagery and descriptions! I love the lines
"I can still feel a hint of warmth on my neck,
But I don't think it is from the sun.
Your breath runs chills down my spine."
Beautiful and amazing.
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