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Hot dogs dying in their hands, french fries cold and bland

 

 

 

The Secretary of State is unavailable
powdering her knows
getting ready to meet the Chairman
of the Broads
while
somewhere else
in the bad part of town
an assassin prepares for his shot
swiveling his pistolas
watching reruns of Leave it to Beaver
with his gal
a ragged out floozy named Maude Krupp
aka
The Flower of Andalusia
who operates best
high on hashish, drunk on sangria

Paparazzi say the Secretary
is a chickenshit
hiding in the Ladies Room

At the midnight briefing
asked by hungry reporters, hot dogs
dying in their hands, french fries cold and bland
her press agent smiled oddly and said
"I'm sorry we have no condiments at this time"

 

 

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  • Annalise
    November 5, 2007

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    This is clever... I love it.

    That title... that title just grabs, ya know?

    Nice. Very nice.


  • Cat gold member
    November 2, 2007
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    and these guys wanted to say hi too..

  • Cat gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    condiments are in the night stand next to
    the breath mints and lotion-

    i love this title- you are a master title maker
    and pretty much creeping up on the master poetry maker level too-

    your voice is always clever and sure-
    there are no run o'the mill storylines- you weave tall tales with perfect word choices and puncuate it with a rye grin

    good pottery my potlery friend!

    m


  • jantastic gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    I think this is absolutely brilliant, humourous, yes but in the most wonderful satirical way. Clever and still vivid it's imagery. Wonderful.

    Couple of little technical things: "TheFlower" needs a space & "hashish" has an extra "h" in it.


  • bigpapa
    October 31, 2007

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    Clever

    I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. The word play is very humorous "powdering her knows" and "chairman of the broads" are brilliant. Masterfully crafted and I look forward to reading more of your work. Well done.


  • dp robertson
    October 30, 2007
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    That's nice work indeed


  • myrataal silver member
    October 26, 2007
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    Poésie Sociale ...

    par excellence!


  • Redstormy gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    Very clever as usual. I get so frustrated
    with politians I could not begin to know how
    to write about them. Good one David


  • islekine gold member
    October 23, 2007
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    This is just way too good!

    Best of luck in the contest, although, I don't think you shall need it!!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • Amera gold member
    October 22, 2007
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    This is really good! I saw this contest and I could never come up with anything this well done! My favorite part is the first line that sets the scene so originally:
    "The Secretary of State is unavailable
    powdering her knows"
    Extraordinary!

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Rowan gold member
    October 21, 2007
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    Now this was fun to read! Excellent play on words~ the ending was priceless.
    So good.


  • FindingFaith
    October 21, 2007
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    So not fair...I was going to use leave it to beaver...great write.


  • naked roots
    October 20, 2007

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    lol
    David, I love the word play in this! Looks like it was as much fun to write as it was for me to read. Chairman of the broads (giggling)

    Excellent poem as always!



  • MuddyKing
    October 19, 2007

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    wit of a modern day Pope

    so many clever word plays in this and each one so fitting
    the ending is perfect
    like our political choices...lmao
    excellent

    pray tell Sir
    whose dog are you

    peace Muddy


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 19, 2007
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    Politicians... a strange and rare breed, lol. I loved the line "powdering her knows" - wondering if she had anything to powder, lol. A very enjoyable read this is, David - nice tongue-in-the-cheeck look at life behind the scenes - not much different here in SA, lol.

    ~ Nicolette

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