everyday we wait for someone to save us
we wait for someone to come and free us
we don't say it but we knoe we need help
the warrior beneath the mask
finally arrives to our rescue
he tris his best to save us from destruction
but we keep sinking in our mistakes
the more he pulls the more we struggle
who is this stranger out to save us?
whom you speak of we don't know
but from this he is here to help he shows
he pulls us out of our trap
and yet he still wears that mask
who si this masked stranger?
he who is not scared of danger
and he is here for us
and only us
to protect us from ourselves.
Please tell me what you think
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Nicely written. I think many people are looking for a hero to help them. If only they were real, huh?
But I think it captures the senitment quite well. And I'm with you - U don nede two wory bt corekt spelin til the poems dun. Poor spelling is why God invented the computer!
My apologies to all the grammer-types out there, but poetry is an art, and getting all wrapped up in the perfection of the language just gums up the artistic muse. The hard part is getting the emotions to spill out into the words. -
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dat's true my spellin sux but hey it's what makes me, me right? anywho yes everyone is looking for a hero even the most heroic people need someone to lean on and depend on
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Wow I like this! It's great. I like the way you made it so mysterious.
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thank u well it's abt the person who looks out for u and what not
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ooh i liked this, good write
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well thank you glad u like it
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Cool write, Fatima. Your getting better still ^_^
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i like it nice and deep your donig fine
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thx glad u liked it
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your welcome
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i didnt really get the story but its amesome
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thanx glad u liked it
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Hey dude this is cool. Finally you put some new things on here. This is cool, it seems like you were talking about an experiment.
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ppl think i am lookin for a hero and i think they r correct
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very intresting write.. a self thought, a belief of rescue.. masked as u dont know the person but ur sure he exsists,as if dream hero ..it goes through imagination and reality as we want to beleive in it and we dont..
very nicely done
you have improved a lot from ur past wirtes.. excpt the spelling.. i dont know why u dont care about it, its a big thing..any wyas m not gona bore by repeating myself
well nice write.. i enjoyed it.. the flow is nice ur words choice was good.. plus we all can relate to this write somehow.. so hats off
abuyi
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thanks
i know i think i have gotten better too but yeah abt my spelling i can't really relate to correct spelling we don't get along very well
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Bloodthornes
This poem rocks! Way better than anything I have read in like the past 13 months. -
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thank you glad u liked it
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Looking for a Superman my daughter??
A nice description of the... Hero, and what he is to us all.
I like this one, but you need to run it through a spell checker, it'll help.
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dad
my spelling not so great i no but i don't care abt the spelling i never have
glad u enjoyed it
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