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Breeze and Breath


poet fingers

tender and delicate

strum my heart with

braille melody


pirouetting

on breeze and breath

of hope’s horizon

only witnessed by

my soul

and southern bound geese


who linger

to hear one last

verse

before journeying

into tomorrow

with spirits aflutter


like my own

marveling at the wonder

of his beautiful

tender and delicate

poet fingers

strumming my heart

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painting by jenedy paige, Playing Solo

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 20, 2007

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    Oh yes.....here it is....those fingers that strum, the heart that drums, the caress pulled to the brast...nicely penned.


  • Mirthryl
    October 19, 2007

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    Beautiful "braille melody". Love the "pirouetting on breeze and breath of hope's horizon". Skillfully used alliterism. I enjoyed your description of the delight of both the fascinated young lady and enchanted flock of geese; "spirits aflutter/like my own". Nice mirroring/parallelism [?can't keep terms straight!] of first three and last three lines. Very enjoyable