Friendship can be a wonderful thing,
makes life shine, whatever it may bring.
We take in turns, being there,
sob, laugh, rejoice and share.
You're the best friend I ever had,
I was there when you buried your dad.
Picked up the pieces of your broken heart,
helped you out with your fresh start.
Then your husband up and left,
you came to me all bereft.
once again I helped you out,
as thats what friendship is all about.
I thought my husband had an affair,
now it was your turn to be there.
It drove me crazy over the weeks,
the truth I knew I had to seek.
What I found felt so unreal,
my man you had tried to steal.
You had broken the ultimate rule,
and tried to make me look the fool.
Not only did my marriage end,
but I lost you, my so called friend.
In tears I asked why you would,
you said simply 'because I could'.
Ever since that fateful day,
my trust has remained locked away.
Never again will I let it return,
for friendships now I do spurn.
Author notes
option 1 betrayal
Heartbreak and Betrayal
A contest entry
- Make it hurt. by LivingxXxProof.
1000 points, ended November 9, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Cheaters Club by alaskanamber.
450 points, ended February 14, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enemies With Friendly Faces by Dead Hair.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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'In tears I asked why you would,
you said simply 'because I could'.'
I hate things without purpose, and betrayal seems to be the greatest of those things. It’s something so mindless and seemingly done just to waste time.
On the subject of your poem, your words were chosen well, and I could feel the despair coming in waves from my computer. You did well with managing to convey so much emotion while keeping to the rhyming scheme.
Well done!
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that was nice. Goodluck!
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Very good. Good luck in the contest.
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the rhyming felt forced but this is a good poem with a strong storyline. thanks for entering.
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Ah, betrayal and for what? Nothing good comes of it, except perhaps a poem.
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wow, this has so many feeling wrapped up in a write. First it a strong tried and true friendship then it dissolves any way. I had a friend sleep with my ex husband it does not feels so great. I can relate to your words. The words made me feel so sad at the end. I too have felt this away.
Great work. I love the range and effect the feelings had on me as a reader.
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it is an awesome poem an all, but has nothing to do with my contest.
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thats so sad and i kinda know what you mean. i've been through similar events. good job =] good luck in the contest!
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It's sad when such great poetry has to come from such pain. Great write, I really enjoyed reading it, and good luck in the contest.
p.s, Your the best friend I ever had
The 'your' should be "you're"
Not a huge deal, but something to keep in mind for future poetry. -
OMG, this is a great poem, aside from the awful tragedy. Great ryhme to it and the words you chose fit
(not just rhyme, LOL).
I really like it, the flow ,the rhyme , the emotion. It's just an all around great piece.
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excellent poem expresses deep emotion's very sad and heartbreaking though
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OMG this is heartbreaking
and wow, what a betrayal
A double betrayal..
This is so honest
and so moving
I feel angry for you!
A very affective write!
~Pastel
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