damn bosses
screwing around
acting the big guy
tall and proud
fuck with a paycheck
screw with your life
and to your face
are so goodamn nice
trying to eat just doesnt work well
when you dont have the money,
and you smoke as well.
thanks a lot you bunched up cunt
for the cash that im owed.
thanks for the means of sustaining myself
and paying back others that were kind enough to help
TWATING BOSSES, I FUCKING HATE THEM
A contest entry
- Paycheck by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended November 13, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any1 think this when they get there paycheck?
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i can feel your anger in this piece, it was a good write, i can relate to how you feel.
xoxox Zoe <3 -
I'm guessing the concept of metaphor is lost on you?
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ouch, your language really hurt my eyes and ears here but i hear you loud and clear
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Haha, wow, for some reason this put a big smile on my face. You can feel your anger pretty intently, which is always good to get an emotion across. Also your rhyme scheme works well. Oh, and as much as I love the use of "twating" and "cunt" I don't know if they can really work in a poem if you're trying to be serious.
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aw sweets i can feel ur anger, very creative use of the english language, "twating" is one of my favourtie words so kudos.
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