He's teeth, so pointy and real
his bite is what i long to feel
when he comes close
I give in way easier than most
He bites with such pleasure
and those feelings I treasure
I've chose not to fight
because this bite feels so right
I now hold the power
to make all humans cowar
tonight will be my first bite
and i will hold another so tight
with my teeth,
I will give him relife
I shall live forever
and bite only whenever
A contest entry
- Spooky by krymsin kyss.
600 points, ended October 30, 2007, 16 entries
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Comments
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Makes me think of Stephani myers books
^_^
I love those books.
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I think you may have used 'bite' a little too often, it sort of takes away from the beauty in your piece of writing. It has nice imagery and thank you for entering the contest.
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Hummmm I like it, thank you for the entry, it was a joy to read.
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Cool!
Great write, good imagery! Best of luck in the contest! -
Hmm...I think you used the word "Bite" a bit too much..but other then that I like it. Thanks for entering and good luck
Avec amour *~Krymsin Kyss~*
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