A dazzling, violent sunset
casts it's calm across the land
reflecting it's most heavenly glow
in warmth it covers all.
The clouds that dance across the sky
a picture of birds in flight
leaving trail of feathers
in sun's transparent wake.
A hint of storm is brewing
yet sunset will not be overtaken
laying arms of serenity's protection
to nurture all below.
The rapid pulse of earthly beat
comprehends the time to slow
as night's veil descends in graceful tenderness
this treasure to be shielded.
Author notes
Prompt 2
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A contest entry
- Prompt Poetry. Options. by The Jabberwock.
390 points, ended November 5, 2007, 11 entries
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Comments
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Beautiful!
I really like the you convey your emotions with Words and Image.
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a good poem, ah you can't beat a good violent sunset or sunrise, every day here, though the days are mostly mad rainy it brightens up at sunset, and i get bright light kicking my eyes as my windows collect the sunset, i cuss it at times but it is great - i only cus it cos it stops me seeing my screen here
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Very well written. I really enjoyed this poem, the imagery in it is wonderfully written.
As for advice, the only real issue with the poem that I had was the use of the words "glowing beauty." The rest of the poem is very well written but those words are very cliched and... generic. Beauty is subjective, what you're doing in the poem is describing why, and how it's beautiful. To use such a loose term throws the reader (or at least me) into a different mode all of the sudden.
Anyway, two words are definitely not a huge problem, and maybe it's just me!
Thanks so much for entering, and good luck in the contest -
Enjoyed the images and music in your wonderful poem--good luck in the contest!
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