Soft and light their wings astound,
Flutter round without a sound,
Awe-inspiring, vibrant colour,
Nothing could make my life fuller,
Delicate and independent,
More graceful than its first descendant,
Land upon my stand-still hand,
Oh how you do not understand,
What feelings you invoke in me,
How awesome can this beauty be?
Your life so short, but so fulfilled,
Now my heart feels like its been killed,
Now once again you fly away,
To your death at the end of today,
I shed a tear, can't helop but cry,
Oh how I love you, butterfly
Author notes
3. My favourite non-domestic animal
In a list
A contest entry
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450 points, ended November 22, 2007, 9 entries
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The way you have described the butterfly here is so radiant. They are such beautiful and delicate creatures, if they would only keep still a while so we could capture their beauty for more than just a second!
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Congratulations!
You made it to the finals!
Thanks for sharing your beautiful poetry. I really enjoyed reading this!
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My favorite:
Delicate and independant,
More graceful than its first descendant,
Land upon my stand-still hand,
Oh how you do not understand
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very nice. beautiful write! good luck!
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This made me smile. While it had a bit of a depressing vibe it was so beautifully written... with a great rhyme scheme and much passion. Well cone. Good luck in the contests you've entered! This was lovely.
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This is just beautiful, it speaks volumes in pretty tones, Josephine
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