I often come to this lighthouse,
to look out across the deep blue sea.
I wonder where you are tonight,
and whether or not you're thinking of me.
I want you to know that I support you,
I will always be here when you get back.
You mean so much and even though it's been a while,
I know somehow we'll be able to get back on track.
I see the sea as it roars and tumbles,
I can only hope that it's bringing you closer to home.
My heart feels so incomplete without you,
please be careful wherever you are and roam.
Can you see that star up above in the sky?
It shines brightly for you as a guide.
Just follow that star and it will lead you to me,
where you belong my love, at my side.
I will wait for you with open arms,
just like I always have before.
Always remember how much I love you,
my heart will always be an open door.
This lighthouse grows colder every night,
sometimes I think I might freeze to death in here.
So when you're ready please come home my love,
and tell me the words that I long to hear.
Take care of yourself and stay safe tonight,
I pray that you are in the best of company.
As my tears fall onto the ocean floor,
know that I am missing you endlessly.
Author notes
Prompt: Lighthouse
A contest entry
- Hope For A More Caring Society (Group Only) by poeticweaver.
700 points, ended October 19, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Guaranteed Comments! by Nam.
425 points, ended October 23, 2007, 72 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I feel this would read better if you had some sort of cadence to it, like syllable count, or just less words in each line. Remove unneeded words, filler words or what not. I mainly suggest syllable count. It would help on some of the rhymes that are weak in certain lines; they do not seem forced but just about.
I love Lighthouses, my favorite object in the world is a Lighthouse. It's my "happy" place. Sad, I know. I know this isn't about lighthouses but for what you're speaking about, almost anything could be used as the base.
A lovely poem that you have written here.
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i wish i had someone to love me like this its to beautiful J why on earth god put all this passion in one man i have no clue but you know how to pierce ones eyes
juju
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You are romantic...
...DUDE HOMIE! Very good stuff here! And congrats on the hm it is deserved.
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Excellent Imagery
What a feel good read that brings hope through the heart you pen with from within. I appreciate your time, and your awesome entry! Keep on being you brother, peace, Brother Timothy~
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Very beautiful, and I love the lighthouse imagery. I have a collection of them in my home. You write this in such a loving way, and yet it is so sad, as your tears fall onto the ocean floor. Best to you in the contest sweet brother, Delighted as always in your beautiful words, ~blessings always~
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This was deffinatly worth reading. It had good rythem and mood; wonderful imagery. Kind of a mystic dreamy sadness write. Very enjoyable. Well done.
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