Allow me to place my head on thy gentle breast
O! Fairest lover grant me to hear.
For this tainted man could never be at such rest
without thy lovely heartbeat so clear.
Thou art foolish my dear knight to think so of me.
What has been felt is broken and torn.
My heart pours out tears from ripped dreams of what could be
and the rhythm of my soul's been worn.
Pause for a moment sweet maiden I do implore.
Grant a weak man the gift of thy grace.
I beckon to thee to race from true love no more.
At peace, 'ever with me in this place.
Girlish innocence desires thy passion in whole
yet past wisdoms warn against the blind.
Strongest lover I can't stay firm for what you stole.
True no better mortal could I find.
Our souls bond together as our hands entwine
and our hearts beat as one humming drum.
Drown in the present the other's gaze is like wine
just as our minds block the world so numb.
But my dashing hero what would thou do or not,
if my heart were to suddenly . . .
Author notes
Okay
STANZA 1 :: The man is speaking to the woman. He loves to place his head on her chest to listen to her heart. It's the most beautiful thing he has ever heard.
STANZA 2 :: The woman is thinking to herself wishing she were speaking the words to him. She sees her heart as ugly, broken, and her whole self feels as if she could not love another man because she has been hurt so badly before.
STANZA 3 :: The man is pleading with the woman, because he knows something is wrong. He doesn't know what but he begs her to let him be her love.
STANZA 4 :: The woman now speaking shows signs of weariness toward the situation. In the end she falls once more for a man. She gives her broken heart to him to hold.
STANZA 5 :: The two speak as one. They cry out echoing how they feel toward each other.
STANZA 6 :: The woman echoes the doubt she feels in her heart. Ending the poem with a question for the man. What would happen if she were to just not be there one day? What would he do without her?
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"without they lovely heartbeat so clear."
^Did you mean "thy?"
This is nice. Definently one of your best.
The idea of switching back and forth between speakers is neat, but I didn't quite grasp it. Might be good if you just put "Man" and "Woman" and "Both" over the right stanzas.
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