The old man lay quietly on his bed.
His breathing was shallow.
A tear runs down his cheek.
In his hand he clutched a picture.
It was of the most beautiful girl.
He doesn't quite remember the day.
It was so long ago, The day they wed.
Since the day he got here he has told
all the nurses and doctors.
How beautiful she is,
He remembers her smell,
as sweet as a rose.
To anyone that would listen,
He would tell of their life,
Each detail recalled as if it were today.
Fifty years of loving life.
Then he stops nothing more.
As if he had died in the accident too.
They know from his son that she had died
on the way home from their golden celebration,
when a drunk driver ran a red light
and hit them broad sided.
She had died in his arms as he held her tight.
For 29 years now he had lived in the past.
His family now gathered by his side,
come to say their goodbyes.
With one last breath they heard him say
as he kissed the picture, and closed his eyes.
Sweetheart, Thank you for your love.
Now I'm coming home.
Author notes
Thursday-wildfiredreamer
I'm not sure where the picture came from
A contest entry
- Thank you for your love... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 20, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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wow... instant tears in my eyes. what a beautifully sad story. so clearly written and filled with tenderness.
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thank you
this is one of my favorites
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aww!
this is stunning! your words were touching... it was beautifully written, keep penning thanks for the entry!
~beauty of silence
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A very good poem expressing true love...I'm coming home...What a great line. Such love never dies!
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Wow!
This was so sad and beautiful! If we are lucky enough to have someone love us like this...how fortunate we would be!
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...wowww!..this is really a touching one, overwhelming-...seems different emotions burst from my numb heart...
..thanks ma'am for that awesome feeling while reading this...
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Ohhh, wow. I was totally allured to this poem just from the first line & the picture. I could see this whole poem in my mind as I read it, as you wrote it so perfectly. The feeling of loss & living in the past becomes a burden for a lot of people. I honestly don't know what words I can use to describe this heartfelt & beautiful poem. I was in awe by every word, and I almost teared up a bit.
-With one last breath they heard him say
as he kissed the picture, and closed his eyes.
Sweetheart, Thank you for your love.
Now I'm coming home.
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Such an incredible ending to this poem. =) Thanks for entering & keep it up ! I loved this♥ -
wonderful
your work is amazing.....i've enjoyed reading every single one.....thank you for shareing
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i love it so damn much!!!! it's the sweetest thing i ever heard.... keep it up
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This poem is real sad and I can see right now it happened for real this is why I love poetry because its so deverse you make fiction out of it or real life. You capured what true love is as a man and woman romance grows as well then suddenly its taken away. Very very beautiful poem one of my favorites.. Nice job
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well
This is one sad yet beautiful poem you have penned here. Such love today is rare indeed. They are but a dream of the past before we lost our way
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wow so touching and sweet i thought u couldnt write good
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This was an excellent poem, expressing true love. Love never dies ony grows stronger if you let it. And memoires never die as in the ending when he was going home
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Oh geez this is just a beautiful story! I so enjoyed reading this. What a talent you have
No wonder why this won gold. Great Job!
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What an absolutely love write
My heart just burst open with joy in this write.
You are new? May gawd dear poet, mountains of talent
in you!
Just loved this poem, the imagery swept our hearts,
I jumped up and went and kissed my husband...he's working
on the car covered in grease!
thankyou for writing such a heart inspiring poem for us
to read and enjoy!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) absolutely lovely imgagery here too!
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So beautifully touching, congratulations.
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With one last breath they heard him say
as he kissed the picture, and closed his eyes.
Sweetheart, Thank you for your love.
Now I'm coming home.
Indeed very touching..I love it..thanks for the entry in my contest..
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Thank you
it was a joy to be able to write this. I love it when a contest just sparks something in side me. This one did that.
Thank you very much for the gold
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Very tender and loving, beautiful love to have like that is often hard to find. Love it! Excellent
best to you in the contest
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Thank you
Even when you think you've found it, it may run away. then what, you keep on loving anyway cause your heart won't let you quit.
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awwwwwwwwwwww this is beautiful, I think we all dream of this strong of true love ...this was amazing I am in awe of the beautiful way you write
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I know I dream of it.
thanks for your sweet comment.
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Oh my!
That is sooooo beautiful. I'm in tears! It's just so sweet and just wow...I'm left speechless.. You have an amazing way with words. Gorgeous.
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thank you for your sweet comments, they always encourage me
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