Darkness surrounds me and I can’t see anything. A cold chill creeps over my body. I awaken to the sound of a whisper in my ear. Startled and slightly disoriented, I try to sit up but find my hands bound behind my back and it dawns on me that my hands are tied and my dress completely unbuttoned and open. I'm in a room of some kind. It’s very dark and I can feel the panic rising within me.
"Please, whoever you are, I’ll leave and I won’t mention anything to anyone. Just please, let me go." I plead to the figure in the darkness. I can just barely make out long, lean limbs. There’s something about this man’s presence. He exudes an aura of incredible strength and something strange that I can’t quite put my finger on… something almost unearthly.
I watch him move about silently as I shiver from the chill that passes through the stone walled room. A candle is lit, then another and now a third. They're placed in a line at the foot of the bed. The room is dimly lit and as he steps into the meager light, I gasp. I’m not sure if I should close my eyes for fear of my mind disbelieving what I’m seeing standing here before me. He’s beautiful. He’s dangerously sexy and he’s definitely not human.
He speaks and the words roll from his lips like honey. "I found you sleeping on a bench in the park and I brought you here. What shall I do about you?", he taunts.
With quivering voice I reply, "I’m very sorry if I’ve caused you any trouble. It’s been a very long day. I stopped at the park to enjoy the serene surroundings. I must have lost track of time and dozed off."
He reaches out to me and traces a long, silky finger over my bare shoulder, moving the strap of my dress further down my arm, bringing my breasts into plain view. I shudder from the coolness of his touch as well as the chill in the air. "Tell me exactly what it is that you see when you look at me. I want you to know me for what I am and understand this my lovely lady, should you tempt me too much, you will be either my next victim, or my companion for eternity. Now go on, tell me please. What is it that you see?"
"What do I see? I see hair of a soft silkiness that’s as dark as night. I see pale, perfect skin. I see the brightest, most hypnotic eyes that burn with tiny flecks of gold. I see... Oh no, it couldn’t be! I see sharp pointed canine-like teeth that cannot belong to those of a mortal being. I see the most sensuous lips and a body that's lean and muscular."
His hand touches me but I can't speak. It’s as if he holds me in a trance. "I’ll untie you now, but know this, you already tempt me with your flesh so just be careful that you don't tempt me with your blood." His mouth descends on mine, that fierce, wicked mouth that's so inviting. His tongue snakes out and teases mine. I copy his motions and feel the sharp point of his teeth against my tongue. I feel him lift me, then push me softly back onto the bed. The chill of the room no longer has any affect on me.
His hard chest is pressed firmly against mine and the small ivory buttons of his shirt presses against my nipples. I feel powerless as I lie here unable to close my eyes, wanting to shut out the images, yet wanting to see him too, even though he frightens me.
He smiles wickedly. Bending over me, he holds my hair in his hand and begins kissing my throat. Fear ensues as I feel his sharp bite sinking into my skin, my soul, my very being and it begins to draw the life out of me. My vision blurs and I see only darkness.
I awaken with a start. I’m all alone, completely dressed and back on the bench where I first fell asleep. It’s morning. I wash the dream from my head as I stand to find the shoes I had let fall from my feet when I curled up on the bench. "Wow! That dream seemed so real, so frightening," I think to myself.
I slip my shoes on and find my way out to the parking lot. Suddenly I feel sick, weak and cold. I tell myself I must have caught a cold from being out in the night air. The sun hurts my eyes more than usual. I stop to rest against a sign post. Digging through my purse, I find a tiny compact mirror. Opening it, I run my hands through my hair and try to make myself more presentable before driving back into town. I hold the mirror up to my face and oh my, it can’t be, but it is….. My reflection is fading.
Author notes
I tried!
A contest entry
- Give Me Goosebumps & Make My Skin Crawl by Touchof1der.
900 points, ended October 19, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very good story. It was done in such a way that the reader wanted to know what would be the result. very creative. Congrats on the Gold trophy!!
~ Mykeee


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Powerful
A very intense piece of writing. You filled with great images and thoughts. Congratulations on the gold. It was well deserved.

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Excellent!
Wow! This is awesome! A great story you have written here. I can see why you won the Gold for this one as it was very interesting, chilling, suspenseful, and kept me wanting to read more at the very end of it. It's great to read something like this every now and then. Something of a new and different topic in here. I think you did a great job putting this together my friend! Congratulations to you on your gold trophy! It is a well deserved piece. Thanks a lot for sharing it and keep up the wonderful work here!
Jeremy0826

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Very well written indeed, quite deserving of the gold. Impeccable grammar throughout, quite the rarity these days. Beyond that trite comment, the suspense and the attention to keeping the flow intact worked wonderfully. You have the ability for short story, it is a difficult thing you have done. And quite well !!! congrats


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oh wow. yeah, this DEFINITELY earned the gold! it's amazing! also, i love the suspense. i really thought he was just gonna rape her and be done with it o.0 the ending is the best part. congrats!!!


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Certainly a very good story of a dream. The sensations you had in the dream made it so real, you did not realise until you woke up. Very tasty description at that. I enjoyed it..Thanks for sharing
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Wow
well this certainly made a really well penned poem and also really made this a very well inked one at that, your poem is very long but it really did its job as I read through out it I even got a little startled and gooseybumped. any ways grear all round action packed like poem and keep up the good work and congrats on gold.
Signed, Paul
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excellent~
I love this...
Quite the suspense in this...
I knew too when she got the compact out that he had bit her
Congrats on the Gold...it was well deserving of it..
I entered too and got Honorable Mention
I do hope you come give mine a read as well
Hugs
Susan~~~




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Makes note to self... "DO NOT FALL ASLEEP ON PARK BENCHES!!!"


I like the way this played out. I think you did a little more than 'try' here. I think you succeeded perfectly. I love the suspense infused within the lines. I just knew that sucker was going to bite her!
I guess now she has all of eternity to seek her revenge? This is great! Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use. 

♥ Touchof1der
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