Not in my bed was he conceived
Nor with coarse words could she deceive
For poor Mathias was not my child
But another triumph for a mom gone wild
The question posed;What should I do
Deny the child, or raise him true
Suppose he questions this skin of mine
Or my blue eyes, his dark yet fine
The wife she cared not for these thoughts
For pleasure great was her course
Affairs, the mended her wicked heart
Let Mathias go, another start
Saints and sinners and course of law
May gather, calling, his life restore
But she the ever ignoble kind
Bade poor Mathias to darker times
...And I wonder
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Abortion--Pro-choice by twilight seduction.
450 points, ended November 10, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Started off nicely. Turned to gibberish.
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I’m going to comment on the poems form rather than its message. I hope that’s OK. The first two stanzas are well rhymed
and smooth reading. My only suggestion is that you put a space in “posed;What” just before “What”.
In the third stanza, “thoughts” and “course” don’t seem to rhyme. You could say
“The wife she cared not for this thought
Her own pleasure was all she sought.”
and “Affairs, the mended her wicked heart”, “They” would fit better than “the”.
The forth stanza doesn’t rhyme at all
but I have no suggestion there because I don’t understand 
what you’re saying.
If you’ll tell me what you’re saying, I may have a suggestion.
Please don’t shoot the messenger. 
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Now HERE'S a viewpoint I hadn't ever thought about. Illegitimate children....to abort or no? Interesting take on the, for the lack of a better word, adopted father's stance. Interesting he would favor saving the boy.
I'll say this about my beliefs on abortion: While I will not say abortion used for birth control is wrong, there are some side effects to it. The thinning of the uterine lining can cause health problems later in life, and in younger women, lead to infertility. So while I think its still okay to use abortion for this, too, it is not necessarily whise to do so.
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As a man
Perhaps i am not qualified to pass judgement. I do think there are certain situations where abortion is necessary. But when a married women gets in that way because of an affair I think different. I know because it happened to me. Thanks so much
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oh this is sad, but you write so beautifully. 
this is an excellent piece with once again so much meaning. Oh I am captivated....
your poetry
and 
Delila
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sadly true
Again just from experience my lady
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Personally, I am Pro-Life, always have been, and always will be. I got pregnant with my daughter, Alexandria(Alex) when I was 17, and when her father and I went to a crisis pregnancy clinic to get a pregnancy test, after taking a home pregnancy test and it turning out positive, there were abortion protesters there, trying to talk me & Doug(Alex's Dad) into living with them, me living in thier home, and Doug living in thier friends' home, instead of us "living in sin", beings that we were not married. Lucky for us, ppl that worked at the clinic came out and rescued us and helped us get inside!!!
Once inside, they gave me pregnancy test, which of course came back positive. Doug & I were both a bit freaked out, bcuz of our age, and they talked to us about abortion, but it just wasn't an option for me.
Now my beautiful baby girl will be 13yrs old in December, and I never ever regret having her. She changed my life, saved me from a life of wild partying. I had to grow up, and leave my wild ways behind.
My best friends' mom, this really pisses me off, would use abortion as a means of birth control, she's had 6 abortions. You'd think with the cost of the abortions, she could have had a tubal ligation, or had an IUD put in or something. IDK. Bcuz She'd already had all of the children she wanted to have, and when she'd get pregnant after that, she'd just have an abortion to "take care of the problem". If she didn't want anymore children, she should have been a bit more responsible and not gotten pregnant in the first place. There are alot of remedies for that.
Oh, well, sorry to rant, and I hope you are doing well.
Take care my friend.
~Monica
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And I wonder too..
Thoughtful work here Bob. Admired your truth and thought put into this. Yes...I wonder too. Thanks.
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Pat
I was written with truth in it unfortunately...But life goes on thanks again
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I am not sure how I feel about this but I am a strong believer in everyone has the right of choice. I also wonder...
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Choice
It is a gift. But not to be abused
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let me see... this one, Ill be analyzing this later.
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A dilemma that faces so many but who makes the choice, what choice, who knows the answer - certainly not Tarja but what would I know? This is a moving testament to our times - thank God I am now well and truly imptent LOL but it's true. Thank you for airing and sharing.
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My friend
This piece was written from experience. Tarja strongly disagrees. But It was not I who got pregnant
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I'm sorry I clicked on your poem and I didn't want to leave you loosing points... but I strongly disagree with your poem and the message you are spreading.
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