always one feeling my soul half burned
abound with magick i, one of the fey
my gossamer wings take me never astray
out of the chrysalis fair fun and fleeting
with a sly grin for whom i'll be meeting
this gold heavy man will be easy defeating
this bumbling fools money simple to acquire
with my array of voices, like and enchaniting choir
is but the ways of the winged conspire
i hadn't seen for my greedy desire
astute was this man of merchant attire
enragement, at my foolishness was provoked
as by the forever green i was forcefully choked
the veil over my memeories slowly evoked
a beckoning finger with dark mystery
strangly comforting like child history
memories sigh and i know i've returned
Author notes
okay so this is the third of my series the one before it is "Fire and Ice"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3497432
and the one before that is "The Universe Plan"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3327540
so in this one i am a faerie... i died in the end of it... if you don't really get how these poems are linked by the time i write my 5th i'll tell you kay?
go for it!
well give it to me straight
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I enjoyed this one, I'll have to read the others too. I liked the form too, it gave it some closure by opening and then closing up again. Like wings. Good luck with the series.
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I like the linkage from the top line to the bottom line with the rhyme.
Your rhymes are fairly sophisticated I think.
And I liked the story about being one of the fae and running around with your faerie-like sprights and trying to steal from the merchant. Nice ending though, with the death via plant.
I like the title also.
That would be it.
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yay! you like it... i had some iffy feelings about this one... it's pretty different fom my usuals i would like to think. see ya
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Love it. Nice rhyming scheme as well. Very well written, and well spoken.
-Silvos.
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thanks! this one isn't my best... i may redo it.
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