A hardened man of forty
he thought he'd seen it all.
How was he to know that he
would be affected by that child's call.
*Please don't hurt them, Mister!*
A little boy of five
talking in a sing-song voice
asking him why he
thought it was a choice.
He was hurting innocent lives
destroying them every day
by helping women get to the room
and showing them the way.
The little boy would not give up
he never ever quit
His little bitty voice
drove the man to fits.
His little tiny voice haunted him
like a reminder of the death
of all the little babies
who'd never take their first breath.
*Please, sir, just let them live!*
Suddenly he couldn't take it
and left in a fright
he just couldn't keep up
the emotional fight.
His mind wasn't changed
but he never would forget
that little child's voice
that made him shake and sweat.
Author notes
4) Why are you pro-life? (only 3 entries accepted with this option)
I am pro-life, because its murder, killing innocent children, and one of the greatest evil's we will ever see.
and this is a true story. the child is a close friend of mine.
A contest entry
- Abortion--Pro-choice by twilight seduction.
450 points, ended November 10, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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How did a child of five
come to such an understanding about abortion? I know we shouldn’t raise our children in ignorance, but some things are just too heavy for a five year old to handle. How sad for the child [and the aborted babies.].
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several other people have challenged me on that topic. my point is that while many people have to justify and make excuses as to why abortion is "ok", a child sees through the excuses and would have the innocence to know that hurting a small human would be wrong. a child would be able to accept that killing is wrong, no questions asked, no excuses given, black and white, that its wrong. that is not brain washing either, in case your thinking that. it is raising a child with morals, so that they can become the future defenders of life.
thank you for your comment!
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Hmmm......yes, the extra stanza helps alot.
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Nice rhyming, although your rhythm is a bit off.
Interesting that in this pro-life poem you leave the man's mind unchanged. Even if this is a ture story, your poetic license would allow you to change it...caught my eye.
Speaking as a judge, and no one opinionated, you could make this poem more influential by telling the reader what he is thinking, describing this man more.
Speaking as someone opinionated, I really think a child would not understand abortion very well, except for the opinions branded on him/her by an older individual. So this poem lost something with me by introducing a child.
I am not trying to be offensive, just to be a fair judge.
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i added a stanza, at your suggestion, that describes the man's thoughts a little more. perhaps it will clear things up a bit.
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well, as far as the child understanding abortion, i think its more of an innocent thing. the child would understand that hurting babies would be wrong, and it took the influence of the innocence of a young boy to get to the man.
And the whole idea of the man not changing his mind, was the he really did, but refused to admit it, or show it. So, while he acted like he didn't change, he was so shaken that he couldn't go back.
Thank you for commenting.
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The poem has a sweet tone to it that I like, though I don't agree. It's obvious from it that you are pro-life. If you'd like a suggestion (but take it or leave it), I think this poem would be seen by everyone in a better light and appreciated more for the boy's innocence and how you presented it, if you took out the part of your author notes about abortion being murder. I know this is what you believe, but it shows well in the poem without your saying this violent, offensive word. No matter what your stance is, I think you can win over more people by not offending them.
~Diana
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so sad
I guess we just must live with our choices
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