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whose work of art are we?

 

 

 

  

you summon our flesh in marble

daily-
a sculptor comparing the sheen
of surfaces-

we feel it weigh
deeper

with every delicate click
of high-heel,

each foot chasing
the other along sinuous lines

in a desperate dance
for upright posture-

 

all with grace.

         [ Oh the perils of drinking
                      and spraining ankles! ]

you have a fucked
up idea of feminine
perfection
but your
trouble is hearing
us over urgencies

in chiselling
at privates to uncover
a first cry,

an alabaster plea
settling us within
your myth-
where beauty,
charm and joy all
aid you well-
marrying lies to
our lips,
that we are born
to serve.

so stick to your works
in clay and call

it wonder-
it takes far more craft
for female

than your dreams
and vacant ideals


when the harshest cut
of all,
is how we long
for freedom,

 

yet carve ourselves
in those images
you hand us
as art!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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  • EdP
    October 23, 2007
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    silly preachy poem

    but with good images

    • EvilKate gold member
      October 23, 2007
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      Yep - it was. Got away from me early and became ranty ... ah well ... as I said to someone below - good for the bits file

  • ariosto gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    Do I sense a message here?
    This is an excellent poem and goes way beyond the sheen of polished marbles or rosy flesh.
    Worthy of several readings

    thanks for entering!


  • naked roots
    October 22, 2007

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    Damn...this is going to be one tough contest to judge even though there are only 7 entries!

    I was impressed with the way the three graces inspired you...loved every line in this.

    [ Oh the perils of drinking
    and spraining ankles! ]
    That made me grin...
    Excellently done, and I'm left wondering why you aren't on my favorite list too...thank you for entering.


  • Grunts Girl
    October 20, 2007

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    'marrying lies to
    our lips,
    that we are born
    to serve.'
    just so you know...
    this hit personal lol....
    good luck with this in the contest!!!



  • ardentMarch gold member
    October 19, 2007
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    Excellent - speechless!


  • birch
    October 19, 2007
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    that sixth stanza-- 'we all have a...'-- how true is that of society? so true. dusty

  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 19, 2007

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    my god kate.... this is bloody marvelous..

    you got me a bit lost for words, i will come later, when i've stopped trying to chisel my two-penneth down for this comment...

    damn damn damn

    unsteady on high heels... aarrrrghhh yes, but i walk like a ruptured duck now with anything above 2 inches, yet i spent my 20's on three and half and 4 inch sometimes, spikefromhell shoes... lololololol

    i'd be lucky to take two steps in them now..


    • EvilKate gold member
      October 19, 2007
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      Yeth but 3 and 4 are so ... ... at least I'm starting late there, so should be able to extend the leg warranty thing

  • Annalise
    October 18, 2007
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    I love the click of high heels. I also adore the first line of this.


    • EvilKate gold member
      October 19, 2007
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      Yeah - thanks. I think it started getting away from me ... but, is good for the 'almost' there file

  • AshliiAsphyxiation
    October 18, 2007

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    this is perfectly penned babes.
    i love the essence of abstract in your writes.
    you & hellz inspire me to no end.

    im greatful for you guys posting.
    it keeps my pen well moving.

    you are amazingly talented.
    xx

    ily


  • marc creamore
    October 18, 2007

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    Oh so bloody perfectly stated Kate . . . when I read work like this I am reminded of the sickness that is a direct result of the shallowness of many of my own sex . . .


    • EvilKate gold member
      October 19, 2007
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      But, fortunately, not all

      To me fair, I don't blame specific people - it's more the meta-messages that are reinforced at a social level. Messages that affect everyone to some degree. Which is why a critical mind is such an important thing. Too many people have the attitude of - 'This is how things are and therefore must be normal' - the kind of thoughtless view you often see proffered by conservation associations that have 'family' in their name.

  • rebeka
    October 18, 2007

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    beautiful kate, serve no one, but those that worship the goddess inside your being. i may of course, be totally off base with my interp of your poem, how is that for a disclaimer either way, it made me stop and contemplate, for which i am grateful to you.


    • EvilKate gold member
      October 19, 2007
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      No - that's pretty close. It's also a look at how so much neo-classical art is itself caught up in the whole myth of male and female, a myth that perpetuates disparities. I feel this one fell toward a rant a little - dang - when it started well. Such is life

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    October 18, 2007
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    i don't feel like art..
    and i am tired of serving

    and ... this is brilliance.

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