She never answers,
though they spit and jeer—
their taunts shot like arrows
in the dark, guided by
the feverish light in their eyes,
set in faces shining with sweat;
She is a cative,
but her captors cannot pull down
her wall of silence
She hides behind
her solitude, a brittle sanctuary
whose only disciple an old crone
in the body of a girl—
faith in a memory
only rots and ages a soul;
Her vows confess
she does not believe,
but she had faith, once
In her haven
they cannot reach her;
They cannot touch her heart,
seat of thoughts and passion;
She refused to answer questions
designed to draw her will,
as a swordsman
draws blood
Stone by stone,
her silence raised over years of labor,
carefully erected
like cathedrals standing testament
to the dream of thousands;
But her wall is no masterpiece,
and is only the nightmare
of one
Though sometimes,
when the moon is waxing,
throwing light on rock like bone,
the image wavers;
Colored glass ripens her pallor,
sculpted columns
add weight to her ghost—
in this her cathedral of dreams,
she does not speak
but sings
Author notes
I build up my own walls of silence, but when I am alone I imagine they become something beautiful and magnificent.
I'm 25 or under.
A contest entry
- Pain. by forbidden-colour.
300 points, ended November 13, 2007, 39 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 25 and under by silverscent.
460 points, ended February 12, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
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"like cathedrals standing testament
to the dream of thousands;"
A very strong image used here!
Thank you for entering.
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this is amazing... and beautifully used imagery! it was a well used click on my part! bravo! or brava! -ph
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You know in dreams, they say a building can often represent our bodies. This reminded me of that. How beautiful it is on the days of a 'waxing moon'. Nothing stands perfect but there are these moments which this poem so profoundly described. I really loved this. And the imagery of the painted glass, excellent.
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Thanks for the applause and kind words. =)
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Very descriptive!
Very good write! Very descriptive and you have left it open to the viewers as to what this was about.
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More than a tad esoteric, but some nicely done poetic phrasings here... good work ("discriple"?) bravo... bravo ...bravo ...
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I fixed that, thank you. Yes, I suppose my point is finely tuned so that it may seem unreachable; that is most unfortunate.
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