Flames pour from a stone heart
Malice glistens like a tear in the eye
Livid words fall like rain from the mouth
See her, feel her, dare to look at her
Anger in her pure form
Nothing you try stops her
When she takes hold of you
Her hand reaches inside you
And wrenches your heart
Her fire burns in you
She possesses you
She holds you in her grip
Her kiss of death in your mouth
Hurting those around you
Anger never lets go
Try as you may to reason with her
She will never listen to you
She instead, convinces you
To torture everyone
Mangle them with your presence
Whilst you do her bidding
Your heart hardens into stone
Your eyes as black as onyx
Your mouth cold as iron
Slowly she kills you
Anger destroys you
Author notes
interesting. that came right off the top of my head.
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Wow, that is simply brilliant. I've never read such powerful work about a feeling before, especially something as strong as anger. The imagery is fantastic, I could actually visualize anger as a 'female' and what she does to anyone. I especially liked the last paragraph, full of cold and hard description. That is truly a talent, being able to make the reader visualize it perfectly. =)
Good luck in the contest! =D
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Wow! The emotion in this is just brilliant! so much anger and pain. I love it. My favourite line has to be 'Her kiss of death in your mouth' Just brilliant. Every word expresses so much. You have so much talent thank you for entering my contest
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Wow wow wow, those first three lines were so brutally angry;
"Flames pour from a stone heart
Malice glistens like a tear in the eye
Livid words fall like rain from the mout"
Just, such cold wording, and strong emotions, it sent a shiver down my spine just to read them - honestly! Interesting to read that this poem just came off of the topic of your head, had i not Known better, I would have thought it was written about a very specific subject or experience. The general gist was quite terrifying; so full of anger, and with the anger, for me, came a lot of hatred - marvellous job!
Thank you for entering
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So I totally didn't see this comment til now and it was made over a month ago. I swear something has to be wrong with my notifications or something. Thank you so much for the amazing comment! One day I just decided to write about what I see anger doing to people everyday and how it destroys them, myself included. And this is what came out. Thanks again and good luck in judging! -Liz
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funny... i feel no hate here... just anger. Anger and hate are two completly unrelated emotions. Or, maybe I'm retarded. I don't feel the hate though, it feels like a story to me
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I think you have to have anger to have hate, but that's just me. Perhaps I can come up with something different? Yes! I can, and I will!
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yes u can!! and thanks for agreeing with me... i do, after all, have all the power muahahahahahaha
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OMGOSH.
This was amazing.
Raw emotions and all, I was holding my breath while reading this..
It's great to know you wrote this in promptu, it makes it all the more facinating.
Thank you for this entry
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wow that was very strong emotioned... i love how you can be sitting there perfectly fine and thinking all these dark thoughts i do that all the time sometimes im happy but a memory comes to mind and bam theres a new poem lo
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Awesome
I have always felt that anger was a lethal thing...I mean, truly, the things anger can make you do, think, and experience
A very good write; thank you so much for sharing and for being a part of this contest! -
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Thank you so much for your comment!!
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The first stanza was truly brilliant. You should really explore that side of your writing. It will help you to develop your own uniform, personal style. This style with help put a signature on everything you write no matter what the genre is!
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Thanks! and I think I am going to try to write more like what I had in my first stanza...thanks again!
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wow... this is dark... nice... i have 1 question... maybe 2... is onyx black???.... is iron cold.. all the time??... lol and wht is this about??... it seems as though it switches subjects and i got really confused.
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it doesn't switch a subject at all. it is all about how anger can take hold of us if we let it. yes onyx is typically black. there is a white onyx i think, but those are rare.
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