so far away in a forgotten land
a lonely soldier there does stand
no shiny garlands or jingling bells
to remind him of the day
on this christmas, in a land far away
endless hours on his frozen feet
walking a weary, lonely beat
no perfumed letters or greeting cards
to read along the way
on this christmas, in a land far away
another soldier comes his way
says "you're relieved on this christmas day"
a quick salute, and to the barracks goes
the soldier on his way
it may be christmas
but it's just another day
No arms to greet him, no loving smiles
seperated by five thousand miles
just a picture, and a greeting card
"we hope that you're OK.
miss you this Christmas
hope to see you back someday".
just for a moment he closes his eyes
and thinks of warm, familiar skies
and the loved ones who wait patiently
for his return someday
to them it's christmas
to him it's one less day away
Right at that moment, he gets the call
" Christmas dinner in the mess hall"
the chaplain greets the soldiers there
and then begins to pray
"Today is Christmas.
let us ask for peace today"
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Please tell me what you think
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Veryyyyyy touching
Wow, I like this poem, I liked how you used your words on it. I wrote a poem kinda like this before. Good job on the poem. Very very touching. -
My first impression is of the lonliness these soldiers must feel every day,knowing that they could die at any minute and their loved ones so far away.I take away alot of the loss these men feel in your words.You captured their raw emotions beautifully I think in this write,Thanks for expressing how it feels out there for these young men and women fighting for our country.
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The title is effective.The repetition adds a lyrical feel.The imagery and emotion are clear.Within the penultimate stanza was unsure of the word "jent" was this a typo?
Sadly the machinery and machinations of war means that the soldier serves the majority of high days and holidays for duty and honour are honour bound by duty.
Even the guards on duty at Buckingham Palace will be there on Christmas Day complete in regulation uniform regardless of the weather and how it weathers them.They are not allowed to move but must stand to attention for the entirety of their shift.
The write was poignant and reminds us of just another of the sacrifices the serving soldier makes but that of course he misses the comforts of home and family even more so when he is absent from the celebrations and the sense of togetherness.
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yes "jent" was a typo. it was supposed to say "just for a moment. my computer has been skipping today.
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how heart warming, how awesome. Keep up the great work.
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You have painted a lovely picture within my mind while I read this...a lonely one...sad..yet with hope for the future Christmas's to come...lovely , thanks for sharing
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I am a veteran. in the 4 years I was in the service, I pulled guard duty on christmas twice
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awww. this is awesome. Sad and bitter sweet. Great write. I loved the flow. THe double spacing is a little distracting though. Goo job.
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the double spacing is neccisary for the chord progression to be added later... this is intended to be a song
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beautiful... sad but beautiful... i wonder wot made u think of this one. do u have a loved one overseas? gr8 piece either way. love to you and yours xxx
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I am a veteran. in the 4 years I was in the service, I pulled guard duty on christmas twice
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