She sits in the bathroom;
While listening to the screams
Inside her head.
Her back is bleeding,
The most beautiful crimson color.
It’s Pain.
The glass lies on the floor;
"I’m going to regret this tomorrow"
Was her thoughts.
That is....
If she is not
Dead.
Author notes
word bank;pic inspired
glass
bleeding
dead
screams
pain
crimson
A contest entry
- word bank and pic. inspired by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended December 7, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hey, a woprd bank, why didn't I see this one and here is some competition, knock out, good job here. Tony
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A very deep and dark poem you have entered here... the danger of writing such poetry is that one can easily bend to the cliched side of it. Interesting imagery and unique metaphors are a way to work around that - unfortunately that's something I'm a bit missing here
Anyway, you did quite a good job expressing yourself with this poem!
Thank you for entering this contest
Leander -
Oh my gosh(ok I'm christian so i can't say it the other way and i know this sounds gay)that is wicked.I am in love with this poem and you.I love it I love it!!!!!!man this is breathtaking.i am in love,thank you soooo much for sharing this with the world.I love it and I know I'm Christian but never said you can't love this stuff!
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Lol
thanks, im really glad you liked it
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that was a fun poem.
i like the imagery, even though it was kinda grusome.
haha.
only line 9 isnt good grammer.
other than that, i liked it. !
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaw.... m not masochist but i just love to feel the pain form reading such masterpieces.... amzingly done.... n honestly i couldn't take my eyes off the screen..... i embraced every word, every sound, every image in this piece.... wonderful
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Very deep and dark. I can feel the fear as I read through it all. Strong thoughts ~ Mykeee
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very, very good. I love that you didn't go over the top but you still got your point across and wrote a powerful piece.
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wow.
this is really good!!
very sad. i like it!!
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Ummmmmmmmmmm......Wow!!!! Very sad!!!! I wish you much luck in this contest!!!! Very well written!!!!
~DAWN~
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nice
this is rad. It is deep and shows torment in a way.
Short but sweet. Good luck!
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his is good your really good =)
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