What Rrises at the beggining
A brand new day awaits
Beyond those shores
The elder of the world
The elder of the world
The oldest one alive
Visits Everyday
Till he goes to sleep
Till he goes to sleep
When hes nighty-night
His wife comes out to play
Not as bright
Not as bright
But makes up for it in beauty
Like a shining star
That can never go out
That can never go out
Once in a blue beauty
There out at once
Shining there brilliance
Shining there brilliance
She blocks his light
And he shows her beauty
A evrlasting couple
Wraped in the fabrics of time
A contest entry
- Looking for Favourites by XxGoldenxXDawnxX.
425 points, ended October 24, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Joy
Comments
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"wrapped in the fabrics of time"....love it....it to me is what seems to be racing random thoughts that you just had to write down...great..
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Other than a few misspelled words and a couple that are spelled wrong for their usage this is a good poem...Scott
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spell check works wonders
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LOL, does not help the words that are spelled right but used wrong though..
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It is a very interesting poem. After reading the comments I read and re-read this several times, looking for the hidden meaning! The only thing I could see that was not obvious was the reference to a blue moon? And yes the sun and the moon are truly a couple who will only be parted by death. Now that is something to aspire too...
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lovely, well penned. Good luck in contest.
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It was nice, but I didn't really understand it. You have the potential. You must be got a really good one and a million women. There is nothing wrong with that
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Thank you poet for your kind and beautiful entry to my contest. I adored this poem, especially these lines:
Shining there brilliance
She blocks his light
And he shows her beauty
A evrlasting couple
Thank you again.
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It's about the sun and the moon... working in harmony.
And at the end it's about a solar eclipse.
It's beautiful...
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thats really beautiful
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Thank you, do you see the hidden meaning or did i hide it that well
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i know the meaning..its really obvious to me but im really good at that
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Really now? then what is it
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its about laney.
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wrong, i guess you dont know
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dont know about what?
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dont know the meaning
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well now my sel esteem is shot down.
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Dont worry about it, no one will guess it
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Do I get to know the meaning of this now?
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maybe
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please?
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