Leaves fall
silently into the lake
as though tears
shed from lofty boughs
sensing that the icy breath
passing through their core
may bring with it something far more sinister
changes in the wind however
always seem to unveil
a different kind of enchantment.
Author notes
Prompt: "When Seasons change" and contest image.
A contest entry
- Early Bird Quickiness...10/10L/30m by poet2angels.
475 points, ended October 18, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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well done congrats on bronze
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This is beautiful and the flow is as smooth as the image of the leaves falling like tears from the branches. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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Aw, so beautiful! I loved the way you described from the beginning to the end, such enchanting imagery. Very amazing job.
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I like this enchantment.
Well written.
Best of wishes! -
This is beautiful and brings with it many thoughts to ponder....The words create much more than the changing of Seasons!
Awesome!
Lynda
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prompt is:
"When Seasons change"
or
the pic above...
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