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Trapped,
Within my head,
Silence infinite, and dead,
And I feel them there,
A social presence undetected,
Leaves me in the dark -
I am alone.
Vulnerable.
The world she swirls around me,
Like that which I cannot pick up,
On my own.

The world is a strange and different place,
To me.
I do not see,
Same as you see,
My perception is different
altogether.

The world,
So bright and so confusing.

Though it leaves me unprotected,
Cast aside and out for differences,
Segregaded always, even without intention....
Is something I can deal with,
Is something that I must,
But though I lay here crying,
I can cope with surviving,
For I can live it all.

This is my Piece.

Author notes

This is supposed to be a self portrait from that wonderful artists point of view. I guess i took the easy route, aye? oh well, hope u enjoy it anyway

A contest entry

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  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    October 23, 2007

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    This is how some people feel that are Deaf and living so isolated from the Hearing world. You brought this to light in a way that fosters empathy and tolerance. Thank you for your contribution in my contest.


    • VoltaicHypnosis
      October 24, 2007
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      Thankyou for allowing me to participate! A furthur thanks for giving me silver!! XxX


  • checkmate
    October 18, 2007

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    This was a beautiful piece. You have weaved in so many emotions throughout in your lines. I could relate so well to the first few stanzas.

    The world,
    So bright and so confusing.

    Beautiful lines. It made me think of life as a neon light, blinking again and again. You have lovely descriptions and a wonderful flow throughout. The ending was simply awesome. I have no other way to say it- because it was just perfect.

    There was so much strength, hope, beauty. I admire your strength in standing up to life, and not cowering from it.

    You are an awesome poet, and I can tell by this piece, that you are awesome in dealing with life too!

    Take care,
    Char