the finale

It's when reality catches us
we fall;
stones become loose
branches snag our clothing
everything in general

just turns to shit.
Ever notice all hotel ceilings
look the same?

I almost choked on the
dregs in the bottom of this
cup
I got lung cancer
instead.

There's an empty
in me no one has touched.

I forgot my own name.

Please tell me what you think

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arafura
October 19, 2007

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we fall...
Dark and disturbing my dear for one so young and lovely... Like viewing an xray... or the stark bare branches of a naked tree! Great work!
Night Hope
October 18, 2007

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"It's when reality catches us
we fall;
stones become loose
branches snag our clothing..."

Sighhh...My poor Baby...But it is also reality that makes us rise again, & our unswerving faith that turns that shit into fertilizer to make the roses flourish. (Sorry, ya know how I am about hope). Stark, dark & soulful, Sweetie. I'm here, if ya ever need to talk, my Friend. (Former) librarians are known for keeping things quiet. Love you, Lady. Hang tough...good things are just around the corner, out of sight...Patience is an acquired virtue, but it's worth waitin' for, my Friend. Wanda
subterfugepoet
October 17, 2007

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staring into the abyss of a bad situation is always lonely business...I've been there all too frequently...you capture it nicely

I hope everything is alright.
tara wilson
October 17, 2007

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"There's an empty
in me no one has touched."

omg - this is really good - quite a dark tone/mood to this, for sure...and I love that line...