As she sits by herself and cries
Tears fall from her big blue eyes
Making her wonder if it’s worth it
Or if she should really just quit
He has hurt her so many times
Even physically sometimes
He likes to beat on her hard
And she stays with that retard
Maybe this time she will leave
Lets hope she doesn’t grieve
Friends will be there for her
Just like they always were
A contest entry
- ((((ANYTHING)))) PRE-WRITES OK!!>>TO DO WITH .....HEARTBREAK ...LOST LOVE....BEING HURT ....WANTING TO BE BACK WITH SOMEONE....EVERYTHING ALONG THOSE LINES!!!>NO POEMS WITH TROPHYS ALREADY HM OK THO!! by xxlisajazminexx.
420 points, ended October 19, 2007, 32 entries
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never let any one put their hands on you... ever
there is always someone better out there that can love you how you derserve to be loved and treated how you derserve to be treated trust and believe ... he isnt the end all be all of your world... so many others ....
great job and written well......
great job!!!!
Thank you so much for entering this creative work of art into my Contest!!!!!!!
much love and respects!!!
XxLisaJazminexX
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Hmmm, this is a heavy subject which is why I decline the opportunity to give it a hard core critique. The only suggestion I would make would be that the imagery needs some work. Other than that, I hate the idea that any girl out there is suffering.
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