These words that lie
scattered
across the page,
the black and white
shadows of the verbal
camera form patterns
intelligence, I assume
mean someone is calling.
Calling, listen,
read, understand.
Is it true?
It is true.
Like the articulated
wings of birds taking
the air in the name of flight,
poets erect
language,
a doorway
the world
where we create
meaning from
our senses.
A few poets
dig deeper,
pull us into a mine
shaft
diamonds, raw
uncut, still,
precious,
waiting for us to learn
cut them into purpose.
I found you
someone else’s suggestion.
I trusted their perchance
sight of the exquisite,
the peacock, the nova.
Enchanted
by the stark
river of words, glistening
they spilled
over commas and periods.
I asked nothing
more than to
fulfill my need
poems like geodes
redolant with crystals ~
the blessed genius
your words tossed
diamonds on the velvet
care
your
heart.
9:18 PM
7/17/07
Alexandria, VA
Author notes
This was supposed to be about our meaningful connection but it is really more how it formed and how I feel blessed. Take it for what it is because it can't be anything more.
In a list
- Poems that have a special meaning to me, none of your business why (perhaps because I'm an ego maniac with delusions of grandeur & a god complex?) • next in list
A contest entry
- Meaningful Personal Connections - points increased! by ellipsist.
3150 points, ended October 24, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The soul of a poet may be like holding a diamond up and letting light refract the many interpretations of each poem he writes. The problem I have is that you hold your diamond in a room full of mirrors, exponentially expounding the alliteration found from refractions of one diamond from a boundless soul. Excellent imagery throughout and poetic device used succinctly, definitively.
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The ability to work in a fun house always depends on how grounded in your own sensibilitys you are. I like spinning watching the world turn around. Glad you could enjoy the madness.
Peace & Love, Tom B.
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A very impressive and powerful write. The words just jump off the page at you. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
~Donna~
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Thank you. Quite a compliment. I just try to describe what I feel and what I see in a way that will strike the reader correctly. There is no perfect communication.
Love, Tom B.
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please do not rate or reply to my comment
"cut them into purpose."
love that line... lol @ your author's notes... makes me think I know who this is
I love this piece... I love what it says, not just about OUR connection, but about connections in general and how they are made and what they can mean... this is genuine and heartfelt and I am humbled and quite flattered 
thank you for entering this piece into my contest!
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I found you
someone else’s suggestion.
loved this. i could read into it on so many different levels. what was yours?
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Belive it or not she was posted on Dalaney's site as someone to read. I read her works and feel in love. Wat can I say. Of course you can read in many different levels. When would I leave words without multiple layers of meaning.
Love, Tom B.
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wow this was penned beautifully
with such emotion and wonderful stanzas throughout......
LOVED it...
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I am glad you could feel the dance in the heart of my words. Love, Tom B.
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Beautiful Blessings...
Amazing reflections ...
I feel really close to this write for some reason.
This is simply beautiful..each and every line drew me in ..shelter thy fall...
Just reading this sends my mind into a flurry of thoughts and words that im far to slow to put down
Best wishes with this entry
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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Beautiful commentary. It is a gift to my heart and soul to know I have touched someone so deeply. Thank you for being so willing to share.
Love,Tom B.
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This indeed was a powerful piece.
best wishes in this contest.
Seems like a powerful connection my friend..always beautifully penned.
Tory
best wishes in to you in your contest.
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Thank you. It was a joy to write and an even greater joy to see you share in it.
Love, Tom B.
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this is just beautiful
the words and meaning
for this goes deep
into one self
for the words are ours
and ours alone
thank you for a wonderful read
Riftkin
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It is always a gift to me when I can reflect, no matter how smudged, the ringing sound of the way someone has touched me. I am glad you have found these words to ring for you as well. It is a blessing when the joy you have found in someone can be shared.
Love, Tom B.
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Wonderful...absolutely, Tom
glad you shared this wonderful talent with the group
Great job
Lady E
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Thank you for sharing your celebration of the joy you found hear. I could ask for no greater gift. Love, Tom B.
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this was absolutely a great piece tom you know i have been a fan of you since AP next top poet and was raged when you did not make it to the end with laura another poet i admire this was a very great piece you dont need luck for this contest your presence along should be of pleasure
julia
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I changed my style to be a reflection of hers. I let my words shift to reflect her influence in my own writing. Once a poet is good it is never any longer about who is better or touches me more, they just become part of the air I breathe.
Love, Tom B.
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ah.. love this...you did a wonderful job
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I have graduated on the scale of approval to an intake of breath, an ah.. Of course I will keep this under my pillow and never, never let it get back on the net May your days be full of the grace of your laughter,
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You are a rare one, Tom
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Always thought I was better served medium well with a robust red.
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Elegant & Excellent!
First & foremost, you know this is a beauty to me just because of the alliteration of crystals & diamonds.
"A few poets
dig deeper,
pull us into a mine
shaft
diamonds, raw
uncut, still,
precious,
waiting for us to learn
cut them into purpose."
Do we ever entice one to do this with our poetry or the depth of meanings within us that cause us to pour our hearts out upon a penning of prose.
The closing was just captivating. Your poetry is changing but it is definitely just another facet of the beauty you have inside with this..
"poems like geodes
spilling with crystals ~
the blessed genius
your words tossed
diamonds on the velvet
care
your
heart."
Bellismo!
All the best in the contest sweetheart
~Joy
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I always want my friends to know how much I love them and how deeply they touch me. I probably, no, I definitly don't do as good a job at that as I would like to. This is one of my attempts to clarify that.
Love, Tom B.
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So impressed with this wonderful write - really hit home with me, Liked the likening to the precious findings in the earth, and the flow and metaphors used throughout. Think this is one of my favorites so far of your poems. Going to bookmark this and refer to it when I think I need some incentive or inspiration to write.
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I truly feel complimented. It was a joy for me to write, I am glad it was a joy for you to read.
Love, Tom B.
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You can touch a poet's heart with poetic words but its the fact that you do see the quality in the words other's write and understand them that makes you truly unique. Love, C
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Perhaps, no more than vision refined from my own experiences and the fact that I know if we listen to what we are hearing, it unfolds before us.
Love, Tom B.
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I think of Helen Kellar reading this. She could not hear, could not see...had only touch to learn speech, the feeling of texture and smell to define her world, yet the diamonds of her heart came to know the light without her eyes, the music without her ears. I don't know how we would define ourselves without touch, for we shrivel inside without it and babies do not survive. It is Mind that interprets lessons of sense, and Love that defines life. Should all human affection forsake me, I would hope that intelligence would still give me vibrance in light, form, color and music to "cut me into purpose."
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You catch so much more. Your heart is so large and gentle. This was for me just how language creates us. There is more but as you know it is found in the poem. Thank you fro such a beautiful review. Love, Tom B.
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I wish I could find someone that knew how to mine that inner genius out of ME! I know I'm a diamond in the rough. With a little dynamite... Eureka!!! Ithica
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Unfortunately, we do our own work, even as we are amazed by the success of others. Trouble is, after a long day of soul slogging and words erased to holes on the page we forget to see the diamond in our reflection.
Love, Tom B.
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So beautiful!
"I asked nothing
more than to
fulfill my need
poems like geodes
spilling with crystals ~
the blessed genius
your words tossed
diamonds on the velvet
care
your
heart."
That is priceless....So lovely...
Lynda
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Yes, I know you find beauty quickly. Hear the way light shatters to rainbows in the tears of the clouds. See hearts seeking a ride late at night when even the stars are waiting for dawn so they can go home. Love, Tom B.
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