Whispers of love
drift along on karmic waves
searching for my ears
in which to empty the words
they conceal
sealed with a kiss
from your adoring lips
you still remain
at the forefront
of my consciousness
sitting alone
in this grand azure bay
your whispers of love
find me and gently
fill and caress my soul
even though it's many moons
since you crossed the evening tide
your love I still embrace
and your ring I'll always wear
and now as I prepare
to say goodbye to this azure bay
I'm sending my own whisper
of love and appreciation
to your home beyond the waves.
Author notes
written based on feeling there was someone sitting in that lovely bay, thinking about a love that had passed from this life.
A contest entry
- Dive Deep Into The Ocean by Princess Perdue.
1000 points, ended October 31, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Goodbye letters by karma-n-peace.
750 points, ended November 1, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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Daddy I got the chills from reading this poem.. and I want you to know that hasn't happened in a long time. death is hard on a loved that has been left behind. memories are often all that remains, but those memories are what keeps them alive in their loved ones heart.
I believe that love lives on past death and into the next world.. until we are united with the ones that we love.
I love this poem, the imagery is very strong & powerful enough to affect me. I could see myself sitting there..
Congratulations on the Gold Trophy Daddy..
I Love You
kat
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So beautiful, the words and the picture.
A perfect pair.
I Loved every line.
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This is beautiful and I'm a sucker for love poems. Your notes were not necessary because the image is vivid and powerful.
Love,
Amera♥
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very nice poem good luck in the contest
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Well, done. This sounds like a widow who has lost their life partner and is grieving over their loss. Lovely memories of the past, which to never forget.
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So deeply penned, your imagery is stunning to say the least. I loved this from start to finish and can tell you have put a lot of thought into this work. Beautiful. Thank you so much for this wonderful entry and good luck.
Shaz xx
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This is so romantic and beautiful!
A truly soft and lovely piece....One of the best I have seen from you!
Lynda
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You did delve deep into the ocean, and your poem surfaced with a wonderful story of love between the waves. Good luck to you in the contest.
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