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Wilted Lilies

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Wilted Lilies



Wilted lilies mourn
like Summer breezes
at Winter's edge
            low and silent


She left too soon
the embers of her hair
not ready to extinguish
and the milk of her skin
                        unsoured


A poppet, childlike
her laughter still rings
in my shattered heart
          hauntingly sweet


Tears on old polaroids
cannot wash her presence away-
cannot drench this stolen dream
and, I am left with unfulfilled promises
and wilted lilies


They, like me,

are left with nothing to do

but sing gaelic runes
of Ambrosias eyes

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Serenitynchains



For Ambrosia
she left too soon
I miss her so much

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  • Beating gold member
    December 1, 2007

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    oh wow! This piece is so sad, yet with such a peaceful feel to it. I felt like I was floating around while reading this. The poem is so poetic and beautiful, and I'm in love with it! Good job!


  • crystallynnbradford
    October 24, 2007

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    this is an awesome poem and I love it and I love the title and my favorite flowers happen to be lilies....which is ironic...anyways i think that this piece was very well-written and I loved it


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    October 22, 2007

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    I am left with unfulfilled promises
    and wilted lilies...

    i love that line, this is beautifully written, stunning flow and just all together lovely even though I sense the sadness in it. beautiful dedication.

    Tasha


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 22, 2007
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      Thank youu for the kind words on this most dear write. I do so appreciate it.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean


  • jcat gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    This was pure magic!!! The music and the words flowed together so beautifully that I could feel this wonderful persons soul just smiling down on me as I read this warm tribute to her...Thank you for sharing her memory with us.


  • JustFallingApart
    October 18, 2007

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    this write drew me in like a moth to a flame and the music fit together perfectly, a very lovely write


  • Ithica silver member
    October 18, 2007

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    I like the way you drew attention to very key words. This enhanced your imagery a great deal. A lovingly penned poem from the torchbearer... Ithica

    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank you foor such kind words on a poem that took some healing before it could be penned. She was a sweet soul, and is ggreatly missed. Your words are appreciated.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean


  • Liliena
    October 18, 2007
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    Beautiful

    I think your poem is full of gorgeous imagery. Such a sad topic, but lovingly written.


    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment on this write. It means much to me.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean

  • flyaway103
    October 18, 2007

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    I love this poem it is expressed with so much emotion it made me even cry my heart goes out to you
    God bless

    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank you so much for these kind words. They are appreciated. She was a very special soul.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean

  • pruedence
    October 18, 2007

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    Lovely...I love flowers, the garden...you have captured a lily wilted in saddness...with a hidden meaning of loss...thanks for sharing

    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      I, too, love flowers, and feel they can convey so many thoughts and emotions. Thank you for such a kind comment. It is appreciated.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    "She left too soon
    the embers of her hair
    not ready to extinguish
    and the milk of her skin
    unsoured"

    This is very sad...certainly the poem has reached Ambrosia in heaven.

    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      Thank you for the kind words. They are comforting. I hope they reach her, and she knows she was loved, and is very missed. Thank you again.

      Blessed be,
      Billie Jean


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    October 17, 2007

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    Ohh. This is heartbreakingly beautiful and so haunting. You did an excellent job on a tribute so someone who was obviously so dear to you.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

    • SerenityNChains gold member
      October 17, 2007
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      My heart broke the day she left this world. It will heal, but leave scars. Her memories keep me company. Thank you pip, your comment brought me tears.

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