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Thoughts of an Angel

Missing image

 

 

As life drained

From my

Earthly body

I remember

thinking

 

God !

Why here ?

Why now ?

Why me ?

 

But now

with Holy hindsight

I know . . 

 

These

were not really

Questions for

God

To answer . .

But for man . .

 

Questions

that follow

Other questions

 

Why

Do people hate

Why

 do we abuse Gods precious gifts

 

Of course . .

For God

My passing was

Nothing personal

 

It was mankind

That placed my

Earthly remains

In this gutter . .

So far from home

It was not God’s doing

 

I became 

Just another

Miscalculation

And tragic casualty

Of  mans

stupidly

 

Men have

Warred

Against each other

Since time began . .

 

All that has changed . .

Is the method of their killing

And their excuses

Why

 

Greed

Selfishness

Egoism

Deception

 

* * *

 

Yes

That war was my war . .

And it soon

ended

 

Only to make way

For

More wars to come

We in heaven

Look down on man’s

Slaughter

and

Stupidity

And we wonder

When will it end ?

 

 

Sadly

God has lost interest

And he is leaving it . .

To man

 

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  • Ellis gold member
    December 31, 2007
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    AGREED


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    October 26, 2007

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    Quite a moral and spiritual work here.
    Makes you really think about things and who is responsible for what.

    thanks for entering!


  • paullallady silver member
    October 18, 2007

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    I really love that last stanza, it has a lot of
    impact on the reader. This was a terrific, emotional, thought provoking piece of writing. I really enjoyed this. The only critique I would give it, is to remove the second "now" in third stanza, since you already stated it in the first line of that stanza, plus I believe without the second "now", the last line would have more impact. You are definately a very talented writer. Please keep writing, for I enjoy it tremendously.


    • agazeley gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      Thanks . .

      I have taken your advice . . I may polish it further later. .

      Regards Albert.


  • ApostolicChild
    October 17, 2007

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    Like the poem. Very nicely done. I don't exactly agree with the last stanza, but minus that, very good poem! Way to express yourself!


  • a.changed-soul.
    October 17, 2007

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    Am I seriously the first one to comment this??? this AWESOME!

    This was an Awesome poem! With Exquiset Vocabulary!
    This was interesting and Creative! I HATE reading, but I love poetry I know it doesn't go together, lol I can realte to this, I also wonder why this happens abusing god's creations and all we shouldn't be different becasue god made us, so we came from the same place, its no ones territory, but anyways Good luck in the contest, oh no I said it, lol you need NO luck this was awesome, and I have confidence in you that you will win!!!

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