Disappointed, that's what I am.
You make me so many promises
and you never keep them.
Why?
I've done everything you've ever asked of me
and you can't keep a single promise.
What do I have to do,
how do I have to change for you to keep one?
You hurt my feelings.
I don't think you mean to
but you do more than you think.
I know I don't do enough for you but I do my best.
You constantly tell me how I never do enough,
how I'm here too much.
You hurt me more than anyone
when you say things like that.
How is that love?
You call me a child.
Baby, things you do and say
are far more childish than I could ever be.
You expect me to change for you,
I have, more than you will ever know.
But you don't think you should change for me.
If I have to accept you the way you are,
then why can't you accept me?
That is what hurts the most.
You don't seem to want me around.
So I'm sorry I'm always here.
That used to be all you wanted.
Things are so different now,
so much has happened.
I'm hurt, frustrated, scared
and you don't understand.
You take me for granted,
you think that I will be here
no matter how bad you mess up.
But you wouldn't be able to forgive me.
You would drop me faster than I can imagine.
And that breaks my heart.
Author notes
lharvey86
Toto, I don't think we're in Kansas anymore
Option 2
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Omg.. the sad thing is that EVERY THING that you said.... I have been through. This one guy did this to me... he took me for granted and when I tried to do things that i would NEVER do for anybody else he said that they were not good enough... I really can connect with this... a hint though... in the contest that you didn't when with this poem... take your poem out then it doesn't look as though you have them in so many contests... it looks bad on your part..
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Lovely write of heart break and life. Sad part of reality of life. Find your strength and move on, placing blame does no good...it just drags you down. It take two to Tango.
Nice rant, a bit long and losses it's strength, but very well done.
Thank you for entering!
Love
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WOAH...
Oh my God! This is a written account of the situation between me and my ex, I swear. She always blamed me for being childish because I was always around and spent so much time with her. I could relate so well to these parts...
"You hurt my feelings.
I don't think you mean to
but you do more than you think.
I know I don't do enough for you but I do my best.
You constantly tell me how I never do enough,
how I'm here too much.
You hurt me more than anyone
when you say things like that."
And reading it again, I can't pick out any other parts that i can relate to because I honestly would just be copying and pasting the whole poem. This is so great it hit me right in the heart, a true and emotional piece that I think everyone could relate to at one point or another. This deserves to do well in the contest...genius. WELL DONE!!!
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this is very well written, and I felt your sadness and frustration like it was my own. It felt like a person being stuck with this person that just keeps hurting them. I have many friends who are or have been in that situation, and I know it's tough.
I love how you got those things out there. Great job! -
oh wow, this was very well written! good luck in the contest! =]
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You are definitely not alone here, many here including here can relate to your hurt, Josephine
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I really loved this poem. It described the feelings a little bit too well, almost made me cry,that's how good it was. And yeah that sucks when people try to change us yet they won't change for us, but just the best thing is to keep being you.
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I really loved it , its tells what you are going through and you are not alone in that .
We try to change for people but it really never works , you cant be someone your not and still be happy . Take that with a grain of salt.
~Lisa~
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hmmm.. kinda rambles.. great write over all with a lot of feeling in it, but you should reword it some so it shows a little more you rather than just your frustration.. like i said, great write.
thanks for entering
<3
lexie
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wow
i really like this poem, its exactly what im going through in my relationship right now, i hate it because i feel like im stuck and i cant get out and im tryin so hard to an everything ive done to change who i am to make him happy has changed everything i am to the point i dont recognize who i am anymore. i hate loving somebody that puts me through more pain than its worth. very touching poem thank you so much for sharing.
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Great piece here, the flow could be a little better. But I rather like it like that. Thank you for entering and Good Luck.
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VERY nice, nice write BUT give other ppl a try to win with out trophies but i might consider
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This is very good i can see you falling in abyss of sorrow has she takes a hold of you.....very good poem
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Please give the other guys a chance. This contest is for poems that have no trophies. Thanks anyway.
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So many times people take things for granted. Not seeing the real picture and the worth until its too late.
great job on this piece
Best wishes to you
Tory
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Great write! this reminds me of a past relationship I had with this guitarist in a rock band. i wasn't his little trophy girlfriend that he thought i should be! This poem resonates so well how I felt with him! great write!
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Congrats on the previous won trophies this is a nice poem good luck in this contest
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This was a good read. I see why it won an honorable trophy. It read very well. I felt very sad for you as I was reading it. Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck.
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What I like about this is how it's purely from your heart. I think everybody can relate to this. It's great though how you can take pain and turn it into something so constructive and beautiful, not many people have the ability to do that. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck in the judging.
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love<333
Thanks for entering,
But I just need you to amend your authors notes [=
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Wow, this is good writing, thanks for your entry into my contest
lol
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I agree with everyone else this was very well done the truth in the words and I somewhat understand this . I think this has realism writen all over it dont forget to put what part of my ap family you want to be
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This is a very well done poem! I feel your emotions and feelings coming through this poem. Thanks for entering- good luck!
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lil sis...wow!!! i like rhyming poems because that's all i've ever known but this is great. some parts rhymed a lil in my head and this is just great. i loved this because i can relate to it. my ex was the same way but that's why i dumped him. you'll get over him soon honey.
~Dani~
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wow, this was exactly what i was going through a couple months ago. you really captured that emotion. very very nice work. this was very well written. i like the last stanza, it had some awesomeness to it that i can't seem to explain. thank you for entering!!
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