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First Date

Leave the key
Under the door
Toss the pillows
onto the floor
take the pedals
dark rose red
drop them gently
upon the bed
let the lights
sparkle with delight
for you know
the time is right
take my hand
white like silk
warm my heart
cause my beat
is so still
the wind may blow
the stars may fall
but you an I
we seem to have it all....


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This one of my favorites, also it's one of my crush's favorites....

Don't you just love it?

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  • dangerously in love
    March 21, 2008
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    Amazing words. Pulled me in and grabbed my emotions. Great job!


  • I Should Kill You
    October 18, 2007

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    wow

    aah. I love this one a lot. There's no bad part to it, but my fave lines are, "dark rose red"...damn good imagery!


  • siriusenigma
    October 18, 2007
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    if i could give it more stars, i would


  • loser-face-liz
    October 17, 2007
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    this is good i liked it


  • Undead Dark Rose
    October 17, 2007
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    wow i really like this one

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