fragile things can wishes be
though strong that they can seem
like porcelain dolls that children love,
before broken and thrown away
ancient things can wishes be
though fresh and new they seem
like the doll you love and lock away
and never see again
but unlike dolls of porcelain
that can age gracefully with time
wishes can't be done when late
so do them while you can,
so heed my words and heeds them well,
please don't have porcelain wishes...
Author notes
options 6 and 7 porcelain dolls and wishes respectively
i tryed to show in this poem that some times it is to late to make your wishes come true, a lot of people put their on hold and leav them for so long sometime they forget or just leave them on the shelf(aka the porcelain doll)
dont ever do that people, follow your dreams and let your wishes come true
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Very nice
I like the form of the poem, and I like the concept of the poem as well. The phrase porcelain wishes is a "loaded word." It contains so much meaning and connotation. Good job. -
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I love this poem, it's so true, but I love the way you've potrayed it. 'but unlike dolls of porcelain
that can age gracefully with time' is my favourite part. Excellent
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very good! you are right at some points, some wishes are left forsaken and sometimes people regret their mistakes in other persons. I understand your meaning. thank you foe entering!
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porcelain doll =]
I love this poem. It's very deep and true.
Everytime you write a poem it comes from your heart and soul or is influenced by what other people feel.
I love it once again well done darling, i love you xox
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thank you hunny, glad you like my work, love you xxx
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