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Since You've Been Gone (Contemporary)

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(Chorus) 

Since you've been gone
The days are so long
I find it hard
To carry on
Since you've been gone

Life's one sad song

I get up in the morning
With you in my head
I come home each night
To an empty bed
My heart is aching
From things done and said
And now you're gone

 

Since you've been gone
The days are so long
I find it hard
To carry on
Since you've been gone 
Life's one sad song

Since you've been gone
The sun don't shine for me
Nor does my soul  
Fly high and free
I feel like I'm drowning
In an emotional sea
Since you've been gone

 

Since you've been gone
The days are so long
I find it hard
To carry on
Since you've been gone

Life's one sad song

Since you've been gone
The stars don't shine so bright
I dread the loneliness
Of the eternal night
Each day of existance
Is an endless plight
Since you've been gone

 

Since you've been gone
The days are so long
I find it hard
To carry on
Since you've been gone
Life's one sad song

I'd like the chance
To set things right
Unchain our souls
And we'll take flight
And than together
We'll both do what is right
No longer gone

Since you've been gone
The days are so long
I find it hard
To carry on
Since you've been gone
Life's one sad song

 

Since you've been gone
The days are so long
I find it hard
To carry on
Since you've been gone
Life's one sad song

Since you've been gone

Life's one sad song


 

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  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    July 27

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    I thank you for entering this piece. It was well written and it spoke of a regret that may one day be able to be soothed. I hope it does for your sake thank you for sharing this piece.


  • cazzy71
    June 24

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    thank you for entering

    Repetition and rhyme was enjoyable,gave the whole piece an uplifting,unusual edge.Very good.Thankyou


  • Antebellum
    June 23

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    reminds me a whole lot of kelly clarksons "since youve been gone"
    Lovley write, I really
    liked the chorus.


  • Ami
    June 20
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    Wow loved this and the chorus is catchy
    Great write and thank you for entering my contest
    Good luck -♥Amy♥


  • toomysterious
    June 11

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    This definitely sings beautifully, I can hear it in my head, even though I can't carry a note in a pail I still appreciate the rhythm.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    June 9

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    So sad!!!!

    One thing bugging me: "Lifes one sad song" should be "Life's one sad song".

    Otherwise, these would make AWESOME lyrics! I'd love to hear it as a song!

  • poets whisper silver member
    June 9

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    This is great. the first stanza (chorus) has a couple of typos. #1 cary needs to be carry and I think you left out the word gone in L5. hope you don't mind me mentioning that.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    June 9

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    this is sad, but to (Carry on) is at times hard to do
    aq wonderful song for the blues jazz type median, thank you for sharing
    good luck
    Linda


  • malmadre gold member
    June 1

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    Another great blues song! with each poem of yours that I stumble across, I understand and love your pen name.


  • AllexisReed
    May 29

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    I'd like to hear Joss Stone sing that one. Love the pic you put with the lyrics. It just screams for that raspy female voice. Great job and congrats on the trophies


  • JeremyWilliams
    May 29
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    Judges Verdict

    good write nice rhyme and good flow
    Best of luck to u


  • daviscth silver member
    May 28

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    This is really wonderful!!! It flows so smooth and the imagery is great! Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.


  • Ti Amo Te Quiero
    May 13
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    ooo! I really like this, sounds quite good! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck !

  • Ami
    April 6

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    Wow, I really like this one...
    I also write lyrics
    This was a great write and congrats on wining Trophys
    You deserved everyone


  • trekkergirl
    December 21, 2008

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    awww the feelings we feel when we lose someone. I never feel good when my loved one has left. great write you have going on here. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Sick Sunshine
    October 28, 2008
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    cheesy in some parts but the rest was amazing .


  • ms-cuddles
    October 20, 2008

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    This is a pretty nice write. I believe that someone is missing someone else. Thanks for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles


  • Shamanicmusings
    September 16, 2008

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    The title reminded me of the band Rainbow.
    I can imagine singing along to this. I used to sing quite a lot.Nice.

  • piccola silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    nice lyrics. There is already a song "since you've been gone ... does it matter? thanks for entering.


  • iamlost gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    I love that last line, since this definitely feel like lyrics to me, and so it makes a good connection about when life just becomes one sad song. Great write.

  • xofightinirishx3
    July 26, 2008

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    i would love to hear this song, it sounds like it would be really good...
    i felt your emotion when i read the lyrics and i know that you are or were probably going throgh a hard time

    thanks for entering and good luck


  • Sorrow is the name
    May 23, 2008
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    nicely done, shows how much heart ache
    and pain, I loved it

    Thanks for your entry
    and good luck

  • the evil angel
    May 7, 2008

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    You've got a few spelling errors and missing words. In general, however, it is moving. It's personal, so reading it makes me feel connected to both the song and its genius writer. Songs don't have to be happy to make you want to sing along, like so many people think. It has to make you feel connected to it somehow. there are many ways to do this, but the personal way is definitely the most powerful. Very well done. I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work


  • WarmHeartedGeisha
    April 23, 2008
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    Beautiful. I love this. And I can totally relate. Thank u 4 entering and good luck!

    ~Lorissa~


  • Redrusty66
    March 10, 2008
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    Nicely done, simple flow and great rhyme scheme. Good use of vocabulary and metaphore.


  • ForeverFarAway
    February 22, 2008
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    A song? Definatly
    Great write
    Goodluck in my contest!
    xxx
    Eli


  • WhenWillsCollide
    November 8, 2007

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    I imagined this almost as a song
    most often when people try a little more than couplet rhyme, it ends up sounding forced and bad
    but this was surprisingly good
    you have pleasantly surprised me

    thank you very much forr you entry


  • aslanlight
    October 19, 2007

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    'Unchain our souls
    And we'll take flight'

    These are my favourite lines and are that great I could've written them! Only I would've done it better of course.

    Peace Georgia

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