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Dear granny

I never expected you to
leave me.
Never expected you
to die.
Now your gone forever
and left us all
to cry.

Everything happens for
a reason.
It was just your time
to go.
You passed on a message
that you love us.
Which forever we will know.

And forever we will
miss you.
Miss your smile and grace.
We may be sad but we realise
you're in a better place.

But one day we will reunite.
This is NOT goodbye.
No man, No god could keep
us apart.
Not even if they try.

Author notes

I wote this poem today (17/10/07)
For my granny who died 2 days ago (15/10/07)
I plan to write it down and put it in her coffin
tomorrow at the funeral
R.I.P Gran.. x

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  • Leanna-bean
    October 9

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    I very much now how you feel...I called my grandma Granny to. When my Grandma passed away I even got Granny tattooed on my foot! I am so sorry


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 9

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    This was very moving. It flowed nicely! I enjoyed reading this. This was really good. I am sure that people can relate to this. I know it would be hard on me when I lose my grandmother. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest


  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    November 23, 2008

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    My gosh what a lovely piece this is indeed.. I think your grand mom will be so proud of you and loves you no matter what.. I thought the way it was written and words are both amazing.. Good work and good luck.. May your grandmother R.I.P


  • DeadlyTurnip
    March 24, 2008

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    Oh you put it in her coffin at the funeral? That's so sweet of you. I could feel the emotion in this, and I grieve for your loss. Thank you for entering.


  • poppa
    January 17, 2008

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    I think your grandma would be watching from heaven with the biggest smile......memories ensure they never leave....from the heart loved it .....


  • my1lovewearsdiapers
    January 16, 2008

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    I am sorry for your lose I know how it is, I thank you for entering and I really liked reading this write you are talented and I look foward to checking out your page and reading some more of you stuff


  • x Gemini x
    January 15, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest.

    I like this peice - its very honest, and a great example of how many people feel in this sort of situation. The last stanza is very encouraging.


  • Amber Rose
    November 25, 2007
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    nice write. i recently lost my uncle so i know how you feel.


  • forbidden-colour
    November 12, 2007
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    Sorry for your loss.
    Thank you for entering.
    x


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 28, 2007

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    ahh so sad mine died four years ago and i have a grandmother series going about her. Great poem sorry about your loss its hard I know i still miss mine very much and cry at least once a week about her .


  • crystallynnbradford
    October 24, 2007

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    this is a very heart breaking piece, I am lucky enough to have both sets of my grandparents still living, but I do know what it is like to lose a loved one and how bad it hurts. I send my condolences to you and your family and hope that you will be able to move on alhtough coping with your loss.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    October 24, 2007

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    This is fantastic, I love how you have written this and I was hooked from the first stanza, These lines are great:

    But one day we will reunite.
    This is NOT goodbye.
    No man, No god could keep
    us apart.
    Not even if they try.


    Thank you.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 23, 2007

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    Its beautiful

    Such a heart felt poem and I know she loves it .I am so sorry to hear about your Granny I loved mine deaply too


  • Obsidian Blade
    October 22, 2007

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    I'm sorry for your loss but thank you for sharing your poem with me.

    I hope you pass through this with grace.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    Dear Jazzy....my sympathies,about losing your granny....I lost my Dad June 24,,,I was there, and I will never forget it..A life lived so wonderfully....You will be in my prayers Jazzy..Love you...Rose Angel..Good write!

  • hose30
    October 21, 2007

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    Sorry for your loss. I know you did her justice with this write. This poem touched my heart as well as anyone who will read this.Stay strong and continue to pray. I know she would haved you to do so. I know she is very proud of you. You are a great person.


  • Griswold gold member
    October 21, 2007

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    Sadly written and a great dedication to a lady who obviously meant a lot to you and your family. Bless you...Scott


  • Nam
    October 21, 2007

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    "Now your gone forever" - "your" would be "you're" as in "Now you are gone forever".

    "Not even if they try." - I feel your use of "try" in this line would be "tried". It would still keep to the rhyme.

    A lovely poem that you have written here.


  • leslielovesthomas
    October 20, 2007

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    Great! Sad though I'm sorry for you loss. Good luck!

    Leslie


  • black-angelwings-
    October 20, 2007

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    Great poem. It's good to know that you're writing out of an actual pain. Writing is good for the soul and I'm sorry for your lost.
    You're got real talent, don't ever stop writing!


  • Nicotine Eyes
    October 20, 2007
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    sweet poem. im very sorry for your loss.Thanks for entering and Good luck!


  • duana
    October 19, 2007

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    wow, aren't grandma's just amazing, and wonderful? I am so sorry to hear about your loss, but keep the strong heart her relationship with you has given you, and the strong faith that you will be together again. This is wonderful. Each poem I have read in here including now this one has touched my heart in away I didn't think I could ever feel again. Duana


  • karma-n-peace
    October 19, 2007
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    First off~ Oh My Gosh, I am so sorry, I know how awful this time can be. Best wishes to you and yours sweetie and I will keep you in my prayers.
    Now, your beautiful poem; Very nice rythm and the write encourages faith. I really like it!
    You may want to correct the spelling mistake of the word realize.
    Thanks for your entry and again I am sorry for your loss.


  • BXs Finest
    October 18, 2007
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    OMG! great great great! GOOD LUCK! and bless ur grannies soul.

  • pixiechick
    October 17, 2007
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    xx

  • pixiechick
    October 17, 2007
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    Brilliant

    amazing poem, im sure your gran would love it x


  • theworldisquiethere
    October 17, 2007

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    This is a really sweet, sad poem. But please spellcheck..."espected" and "realise." Otherwise, good job and thnak you for entering!


  • XxXAmazed MeXxX
    October 17, 2007
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    great write!

  • XxXAmazed MeXxX
    October 17, 2007

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    Hey, really sorry to hear about your loss. Just know that she is in a better place. In time all wounds heal. I just lost my dad so i kinda get it. Sorry!

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