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My Hibiscus

The unscented beauty
of such simplicity

A thrift smile
of a bountiful bliss

Unsweetened dews that filled
the empty holes of mine.

Helps my body to bloom
towards the wishing stars.

 

 

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  • crimsondew
    January 2, 2008
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    Wonderful imagery on the bud blooming..Like it....

  • momentarylapse
    October 21, 2007
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    i liked its simplicity.does it really have no scent?our gumamela?hmmm


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 17, 2007

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    Yes, these are lovely flowers that some can grow so well, and others have no luck growing at all. Liked the flow and the couplets used in each verse.


  • XxXAmazed MeXxX
    October 17, 2007

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    This is a great write. I honestly love it. Keep up the wonderful work.
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