On her knees, she begged Her please
To pull the rope around her skin
And in her moans and in her groans
Her name she screamed. It begins.
Naked before her mistress, beauty divine
Knife marks her body, pleasure marks her whines
Helpless, tied up, a slave of sinful desires
She shivers, she quivers, as she’s pulled towards the fire
Bites her lip, swallows the heat
A masterpiece of scars on her body’s painted
And as she struggles, she takes a beat
Forever her flesh shall now be tainted
A slave in the name of ecstasy
In her ropes she now rests
When her mistress, her majesty
Carves Her name upon her chest
In a list
A contest entry
- Adults only (sorry! haven't had one of these for a while now) by Tattboyspet.
800 points, ended October 30, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very Intense!
I love the imagery and the emotion!
My favorite line: "She shivers, she quivers, as she’s pulled towards the fire" because it shows both sides of the beautiful spectrum... and I have no least favorite. *smiles*
Excellent work! Thank you.
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Wow, this is just phenomenal. I especially love the line,
"Helpless, tied up, a slave of sinful desires
She shivers, she quivers, as she’s pulled towards the fire"
Fantastic. Well done!
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this is really awesome
"A slave in the name of ecstasy
In her ropes she now rests"
You know sometimes we get also addicted to depression and the pain...sometimes we are happy but we never see it happening since it doesnt feel good as when we are sad or hurt...
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..deyman kel shi bel 2eleb
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ranna this is the one from the art lounge ur an amazing soul yay yay
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oh girl its jst amazing, i dont wanna repeat myself everytime i comment so am jst gonna say WOW, *sigh*
peace
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All I can say is...
Ouch!
Not to into this stuff but your wording is incredible.
"Swallows the heat a masterpiece of scars" Great line there as is the rest.
Last stanza: In her ropes now rests when her mistress, her majesty Carves Her name upon her chest.
I'd say more like passed out from the pain myself. haha...
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GOOSEPUMPS!!!!! oh how i love the way ur brain works!!
this is so inviting, so sensual, so fasinating, an invite to this sensual word of intensified senses where whispers pierce thru skin like pins and needles and kisses cut like blades and razors...
captivity is amazing when pleasure is a key element.
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"Bites her lip, swallows the heat
A masterpiece of scars on her body’s painted
And as she struggles, she takes a beat
Forever her flesh shall now be tainted"
Amazing image!!! Another amazing dark one...
best of luck in the contest
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the master of sadism oh man am so glad i never met u , a true master piece
A slave in the name of ecstasy
In her ropes she now rests
When her mistress, her majesty
Carves Her name upon her chest
loved it
best of luck
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such festival of sadism n masoshism.... i love it.... great.... i felt the pain.... i felt it real....... amazingly done
good luck in the contest
PEACE
*******JOWELL********
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Awww Beautiful Rana!!!
This should b the winner, most certainly, you really captivated that picture and did it the most hottest of justice. Within your lines is a story and the idea of the scars being painted on made this a terrific and heart racing piece. The flow was lovely, everything fitted so perfectly to bring this piece to life. Magnifico...Wishing U all the best dearest!!!
Luvz ya...WIN IT GIRL WIN IT!!! ~Wuah!
~BI!
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thx u thx u lol! am glad u liked it
loads of kissessss!!!
luvv ya
~rana~
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and the slave discovers freedom through obedience...
pleasure through pain...
amazing write...
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absolutely captivating
"Bites her lip, swallows the heat
A masterpiece of scars on her body’s painted
And as she struggles, she takes a beat
Forever her flesh shall now be tainted"
reading this was almost painful. I loved the multiple rhyming in the first stanza, and the ending was perfect, seriously,
"When her mistress, her majesty
Carves Her name upon her chest"
so beautiful in such a dark twisted way. as always.
excellent!!
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glad u liked it
n thx for the title
~rana~
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hmmm ... thank you for this entry - it was enjoyable
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thank you and good luck with the judging
~rana~
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