this serene silence
seeps through my veins
straight to my heart
[where it echoes some soft soliloquy]
this stellar night
sings blissfully
no salty tears slide tonight
[those solitary simmerings of lost sentiments are gone]
no matter what,
you swim
into my view
"blood, sweat and tears,"
my love,
[all any of us have to give]
and still
i'm always lost
when you're away
[show me, somehow]
these shots are worth taking
[say to me]
these decisions are meant for making
you're so sensible
and sweet
your skin
lets me in
we don't need any
sleep tonight
Author notes
this is really random actually. i just tried to use a lot of "s" words {as you can probably tell} and just show emotion... yep.
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900 points, ended October 26, 2007, 45 entries
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Comments
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I enjoyed reading this. It is something that I can relate to. I may not take it the exact way you mean it, but I can relate to it. You are a very talented writer, and I hope to read more of your excellent work. Bravo!! Bravo!! Keep up the good writing.
Good luck in the contest.
Always
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i like it good luck
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impressed
Your style is really good.
I enjoy in thoroughly!
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That was lovely.
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It was random, but it still made alot of sense. I read it twice and I really loved it. All the "s" words made it softer to me. Most words that start with "s" make me think that.
I loved it.
~Restless and True~
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wow, this reminds me so much of my own relationship. I really like the use of alliteration here with all the Ss - usually it's so overdone it annoys me - but this is ssssmooth. I like the excited, punchy feeling of your poems.
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very excellent and I liked where you went with this, it really was a different take on a poem and I delighted in it's uniqueness , shows your ability for creativity and the flow was done up so wonderfully you painted a very soft loving feeling to this poem as well, thank you for sharing, ~blessings to you always~
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