I've known you at your best...
And your worst for that matter.
I've watched you step gently,
And I've watched you stomp each blade of grass until they bled.
I've walked by your side as I softly held your hand,
And I have chased you downhill grasping at your fingertips.
Now your golden eyes are turned blue.
You glare at the world with a half-turned smile.
And, still I would have danced for you.
I have foolishly believed the lies of this world.
I have fed upon hopes of desire.
I feel like I'm picking at the bones.
There is nothing left for me.
As if I truly expected anything else?
Why should I deserve anything?
I watched you tumble down that hill
Once I realized I couldn't reach you.
I lost you a long time ago.
I know I'm just the flame after the fire.
The comfort at your side after the storm.
You smear my makeup, and I don't seem to mind that you take out of hurt.
You so desperately want to feel loved.
Well...so do I.
So why is it I keep imagining the gold to refill your eyes?
Why do I sit here and twist my fingers over yours?
You hold my hand out of desperation.
I hold yours out of foolish hope.
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option 2 and 3 really
age 22
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I like the comparison in the last two lines. This poem has some great imagery and really shows emotion well. Great work on this piece; I nly have one suggestion:
The comfort at your side after the storm.
You smear my makeup, and I don't seem to mind that you take out of hurt.
You so desperately want to feel loved.
I think the second line is a little too long. But other than that, I liked this piece!
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this was a good read, thanks.
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Amazing
A word I seldome use
I say this not so much for the beauty of the words,
yet more for the lovely crafting of your deep emotion
I loved how you loved him, I wonder how it failed...?
Rick
For the 95th time in 11,965 Comments, I say the word Amazing
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Your poem pictures a desperate situation which is probably all too common. It tells a lot of the story and leaves me to hope for a happy ending. Good work.
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I think you're last 4 lines sum up really well how you're feeling at the moment and how he is. I thought this was a beautiful piece. It was great to get out how you feel, I could imagine as well. Wonderfully written. Hope is good, but hope should only be there when someone has shown you there is cause for it. Don't fall into tricks or traps, it hurts a lot honey, trust me. You deserve someone who will treat you right.
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I love the last stanza of this, it's something that I can relate to with each and every word. nobody should have to feel like this. nobody at all. it is such a terrible feeling.
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