Overhead flies grace and beauty divine,
but below lies all those left behind
Hidden from the radiant, holy light,
Obscurred by the tears of night
Hiding in the pieces of a greater dark,
and told not to fear, but to have heart
Look to the things that fly above,
Hold on to the shimmering hope of love
Engulfed in sorrow's silent symphony,
Subject to bittersweet catastrophy
To search for hope they do not dare,
because to fall again is too much to bear,
Instead they float on broken wings
and live out the song they sing
Forever to dwell in darkness's light
Never again to take flight
Soaring on silent wings they glide
Casting shadows so other may hide,
Radiant in an unending light,
They never see the dark of night
Forever trapped in radiant embrace,
Reflecting from thier holy faces
Beaming into a world of light and dark,
Two worlds, miles apart
Author notes
I like it... hopefully you all will too. "Angels with silver wings shouldn't know suffering... I wish I could take the pain for you"
A contest entry
- Anything Rhyming by leslielovesthomas.
300 points, ended November 2, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Black, White, And Shades of Gray. -Contrast- by sleepingINblackRain.
700 points, ended November 9, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was a beautifully written poem. I really really enjoyed it. The last two lines most definitely brought everything together nicely. They were my favorite lines in the whole thing. All together it was incredible. Every other comment says everything... nothing left for me to say
Great job. Loved every word
-Faded
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Beautiful, and it fit the topic. Wonderful job, this poem allows you to feel as though you are floating through it.
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This is an amazing piece!!
I love the last two lines..."Beaming into a world of light and dark,
Two worlds, miles apart". GREAT!!!
So beautiful. I love it
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
Leslie
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Sorry - third comment - applause x
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Oh and by the way, I love the title!
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Oh My God, this is an incredible piece, it really is...I would write out my favourite lines but it would just take up the majority of the comment! There are so many intricate wonderful (and saddening) images conjured up by this poem...
Your vocabulary is also very good: grace, radiant, symphony etc etc
The rhyme is good too. The flow isn't as good but it's not terrible (that sounds bad...what I'm trying to say is that the flow is good...but not great!)
To search for hope they do not dare,
because to fall again is too much to bear,
If pushed - those are my favourite lines
Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest
Never ♥
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