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untouchable...

Lay me down
Kiss me slowly
Touch me gently
Tell me you love me
tell me how much
Lets watch the storm
Light the candles
And make sweet love
Listening the the rain and thunder
And our laboring sounds,
We've been working mighty hard for this
I love you with all my heart
So I give my love to you the best i can
I show you by giving you a precious gift
You lay on top of me,
Caressing my body
With every touch you send chills through my body
You slowly start to undress me as do i you
And you kiss me soft but wanting...
You want me, and i want you just as bad
I'd give you anything
As we continue to make sweet passionate love
You make every dream come true,
Until i realize youre untouchable
Youre no longer here
Youre on the other side of the country
besides i'm forbidden to see you
Youre gothic
I'm not...
Who cares?
Youre a grown man,
I'm almost an adult,
one more year and we can be together
As of now youre untouchable.
I cant have you
It breaks my heart,
I want and need you

Author notes

Its about my ex, Y.Y tear... lol anyway donno if this is what you wanted this is just what happened to come out...

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  • Wulf-Eyez De Winter gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    This is a great poem...it is exactly what i wanted to read *she smiles faintly* thank you very much...i loved it

  • Page Deleted
    October 17, 2007

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    i like it...i can tell its full of emotion...it is a very good write...i also think that maybe if you left out the lines of "Youre gothic I'm not..." it wouldve left more to the readers imagination...it is still very good i like it


  • XxXAmazed MeXxX
    October 17, 2007
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    I love it. It is a really good write! Keep up the wonderful penning!
    Later
    Brit Brit


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    October 17, 2007

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    *shiver* Very nice, my dear. This one actually reminded me of my own story... He was an ex-Gothic artist, the stereotypical dark, angsty type, and I... Well, I had just come off of a messy breakup and was feeling mean Besides that, we were 14 years apart [he's 34, I'm 20]. Anyway, I just wanted to tell you that I love this poem, mostly because I can relate so well to it! Good luck in the contest!

    L.