They live blissfully in their sin
Ignorantly spinning webs of deceit.
They're catching all they can for the feast.
Hollywood is drowning, oh how its drowning.
As the water fills their lungs, they cry for more.
They prey on the innocent and live in the dark.
No Angel of Mercy will save them from themselves.
For God has stayed His hand, He lets the
Angel of Destruction work his mad magic.
Their dying and already dead, but living fully
In their death... and loving it.
Every second of painful separation brings them closer
To the evil one. And they willingly submit themselves
To torture... masochists, the lot of them.
Hollywood is drowning, oh how its drowning.
When will they see that He is the only way.
No Angel of Mercy will save us from ourselves.
Only the risen one, The Lord of Lords can bring us from the depths
Hollywood is drowning... forever its drowning.
Save us from ourselves oh Lord.
Author notes
ARADIA CONTEST
A contest entry
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Oh how true this poem is, if anyone in hollywood could read this- maybe it would change some of them... but then again it probably wouldnt because so many of them claim to believe and have faith in God, yet look how they go on living their lives... letting the paparazzi take pictures of their panties and their pantieless crotches. it's disgusting. good luck in the contest!
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Hi there! Thanks for entering my contest. This is a good write that's going into the finalists.
It is well thought-out, and expressed with emotion; I especially like the spider image at the beginning. Good work!
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Welcome to my contest. This is a good start. I liked the repetition of “Hollywood is drowning” because it seems to bring back the focus of the piece. However, some cliché phrases took away from the originality of the piece: “spinning webs of deceit,” “Prey on the innocent” and “Angel of Mercy.”
I think this piece would benefit a lot if you omit some parts a bit, the repetition of “oh how its drowning” seems a bit unnecessary.
In the line, “In their death.. and loving it,” I rather you show me instead of tell me. Same idea for “Every second of painful separation brings them closer / To the evil one.” I think you can also loose “in their death” because we understand this already in the lines before.
Also, “its” should be “it’s” in the context you are using the word.
Just some thoughts on how this may work better if you care to re-rewrite. Good luck!
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excellent write with intense emotions i wish u the best of luck in this contest as well as your future writes keep up the great work
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Backed by intense emotion but it seems blunt, overt. It doesn't give us a chance to dig into it, understand it, make it part of our imaginations. We either have to agree or disagree, nothing more.
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Wow. This is so brutally true, I wonder when we will as a whole realize that we are in peril and cry out for Him. We have gone so utterly astray that we don't even know we're in the dark. I pray that everyone can figure it out before it's too late.
Great write.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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So true
Our world has gone mad and yet we watch its demise everyday we pay for the network to stay on
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