A being of enigmatic repose.
To and fro
She comes
She goes.
A slice of heaven when shes around.
I'm waiting for her to save me,
to unlock the chains, that I might not drown.
But now her back turns.
And my heart dives from bliss to burns
and the lack of words
is an unbearable exchange of solitude.
Ashes and Urns.
She's the light in my darkness
but it was her that first blew out the torch.
Shes the freedom I seek
but it is her that holds the key to my chains.
So I wait for her return.
My saint! With a kiss,
Save me from yourself
That I might smile again.
Reverse this curse.
From burns to bliss.
Have sympathy, have empathy!
For God's own sake show a lack of apathy!
But the keys, the light and the love you've hoarded selfishly.
A being of enigmatic repose.
To and fro
You come
You go.
A slice of heaven when your around.
But you refuse save me,
you've left me in chains to drown.
A contest entry
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400 points, ended November 2, 2007, 37 entries
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Comments
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So Sad.
This is great, The sensory imagery is awesome when it comes to feelings and people. I enjoyed reading this and congrats in the contest, you deserved it.
-Paige
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you kinda lost me on the fourth stanza as far as rhyming goes but stiull a good poem. Thank you for entering and good luck with the contest.
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:)
Brilliant poem
Just the sort of thing i'm looking
For in this contest.
Great job
Good luck in my contest
From Jaz <3 -
Thank you for entering my contest. I like it!
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JUDGED
What I like: My favorite part was
She's the light in my darkness
but it was her that first blew out the torch.
Shes the freedom I seek
but it is her that holds the key to my chains.
It was a very touching piece...
I found nothing wrong with this peice (I am very easy to please... lol) It had no spelling errors that I found and was delightful to read... Good write and thank you for entering
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Very expressive for a rhyming poem, I usually don’t care for them as I feel they restrict the authors creativity for such a trifle thing as rhythm but this poem is different, it seems you were able to overcome that obstacle. I would like to see how much better you do without the hindrance of rhyming so I’ll check out some of your other poems
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