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He did her WRONG!!!!!

All the pain came down all at once

Now all she has is her pillow and a blanket to hold

She feels like a loser now and forever

How can she feel better, if she's down in the weather

 

She crosses her hand so tight, they bleed

She bled so much she couldn't believe

She wraped herself back in a ball

She's on her bed and up against the wall

 

How could he'd do this to her

She was so young and insecure

She relied on him for all the right reason

Now he broke her into pieces

 

She looked at her arm, and started to wonder 

How could she live this lie as a blunder

She searches and searches for something sharp

Anything to get her mind off of that shark

 

As she was in pain, she took a breath

He came in and touched her breast

He gave her warnings about being quite

She nodded and shut her mouth tight

 

He touched her with his hand

He felt her body over and over again

She felt like a slut for acting so numb

Then she never realized he was wrong

 

He felt her wrist and rubbed the blood in her face

He knew she was dieing, he was too late

He holded so tightly, she gave a faint

He touched her again and then he did mate

 

He corest her body with painful motion

He loved it so dearly, it made him naughty

He touched her inside over and over

Just til' then, he done her

 

He thought he scored a High School chick

Then he realized, it just clicked

He saw her face with such dispair

She finally woke up, and saw him there

This didn't seem fair

 

She scream and hit him

But he wouldn't get off

He watched her layed there, saying no,no.....

She wimpered and whined, until he finally yelled

 

She felt more pain inside of her body, she never felt so soar

Then she realized, she was raped by the man next door

She finally had enough, she cut her wrists and died in his arms

He watched her blood, until there was no more

 

He got up off the bed, and headed for the door

He watched her lay there, he called her a whore

He knew what to do is to call the cops

And tell them this girl has been murdered alot

 

He takes a picture of her, for memory and use

To one day, show his family" She was raped and abused"

All he has to say was goodbye and good writtens....

As she layed there,raped and murdered

She gave one last murmur

 

He saw her face and in fright

She said,"to all a goodnight"

He knew  she nevered belonged

Then herealized he knew he did her wrong!!!!

 

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plzzzz enjoy...an comment it, id really liked to her ur opinion on this piece

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  • PersuingHappyness
    November 15, 2007

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    I did find a lot of mistakes in this and I really advice you to copy and paste this poem into microsoft word or another piece of software like that...
    I really like the poem... it was filled with and lot of pain... and a little bit of angst... Thought I do think that you should change the color of the writing it was really hard for me to read...
    Good poem and good luck in the contest
    PersuingHappyness


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    October 27, 2007

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    :)

    That is truely brilliant!
    I would love to read more of it
    There a few spelling mistakes you'l wanna fix
    Apart from that.. excellent
    Good luck in my contest
    From Jaz <3


  • crystallynnbradford
    October 18, 2007
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    wow