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Halloween ghost

I was walking along
Not making a sound.
If you search for me I will be gone
Not touching the ground.
I have no soul or even a heart.
I was murdered and everything was taken away from me.
Its tearing me apart.
On that special day when someone killed me.
I roam on halloween night, with a mission to carry.
Finding where i should go
Some place exciting and scary.
Hovering high and low.
Waiting for a victim that needed to be scared the most.
ause Im just a simple halloween ghost.

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Halloween!!!!!!!!!

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  • darlintlc silver member
    April 25, 2008

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    I just love Halloween and all the spooky things in the night. Nice job on describing a ghost with a mission:

    "Waiting for a victim that needed to be scared the most"

    I could think of a few of those! lol

    "On that special day when someone killed me"

    Don't know if I would call it a "special" day...but maybe this ghost enjoyed being a ghost more than they enjoyed living. lol

    Nice poem


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    April 23, 2008

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    quite nice really, with a subtle flow and closing with a simple sentence

    I roam on halloween night, with a mission to carry.
    Finding where i should go
    Some place exciting and scary.
    Hovering high and low.
    Waiting for a victim that needed to be scared the most.
    ause Im just a simple halloween ghost.


    although some punctuation might help, it really doesnt seem to need it
    good day to you


  • Midgetbridgey
    April 23, 2008

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    I love it!
    It reminds me of how my mom was born on Halloween and how all the spirits are thought to be lurking around that night


  • Powered by Tofu
    April 21, 2008

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    great poem! very errie and mysterious, great flow, i really liked it. great write!!!
    xoxo,
    --gooshawn <3


  • SemiCharmedLife
    April 20, 2008
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    AHHHHH!!! I'm scared!!!!


  • Perception
    April 20, 2008

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    Yikes.. Very scary... I wish you included more of story though... It was very brief... Yet quite scary.... I think it did justice to halloween

    Great job


  • EmmaDilemma93
    April 18, 2008
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    this is cute
    gahh
    I miss Halloween
    it's my fave. holiday
    but this was a very good
    cute poem


  • JoshuaScott
    April 17, 2008
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    cool, makes me want it to be halloween again...


  • Funluvingrl16
    April 17, 2008
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    lol i like this. interesting and clever.

  • Judith Chandler
    October 16, 2007

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    the ghost of Hallowe'en past

    this made me smile. It's lighter than some of your other pieces. "I'm just a simple hallowe'en ghost." I like that.


    • Vietbabe909
      October 18, 2007
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      Thanks

      This poem is lighter than my rest of my poems. my other poems are my emotions in situations. thanks for the comment.

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