i tiptoe through the freezing shrouded woods
looking behind my back at every moment
tiptoe, tiptoe, CRACK!
my senses cringe as the stick snaps
the nearly-full moon glows ominously
as a chill slides up my spine....
i hear the snarling fury
of an animal unkind
i face the dark unknown from where the sound came
gleaming eyes stare murder into my soul
fangs dripping with strings of poison come
to rest upon my forearm
silence broken, i contort with pain
as those fangs sadistically snap my bones
my vulnerable flesh torn, hanging barely there in spirals,
hot blood flowing freely and quick
my throat choked with vomit yearns
to make a dying sound
i manage a squeak,i'm already so weak
as the demon who killed me escapes
my mind floats above the wrecked carnage
the pain was just too great for any mortal
to survive
my haunted eyes turn again upon my corpse
still writhing and jerking, more nerves than life,
then i glance at the bloody marked path
i hover oh-so-vengefully behind that demon
my transparent fingers reach to grab
that beast's heaving wet throat
a coldness i never knew i had grips me as it suffocates
the deed done, i decide to visit my dying place
there i'llstay, forever put away,
until another mortal dares tiptoe
in the freezing shrouded woods
Author notes
my inspiration for this actually came from the background of the contest i wrote it for. C:
A contest entry
- Give Me Goosebumps & Make My Skin Crawl by Touchof1der.
900 points, ended October 19, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Death by Beating.
450 points, ended November 30, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkness Eternal by Priest Winter.
600 points, ended November 21, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice!
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Very awe-inspiring and quite haunting. Very very well done!
Good luck in the contest! -
this is really good, and definitely gave me goosebumps. Very well written, but I think I would split it into stanzas, just to make it more organized. But maybe that's just me. Anyway, good job on this!
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Feel the chill touch of the grave.
Red eyes glow from behind a dark shroud. The malevolent wraith patrols the woods that have served at it's tomb. The demon, long gone, that took it's mortal life, still laughs in Hell.
Gypsies avoid the haunt, and their songs warn others away. But once in a while, fortune smiles upon the spirit. It's terror continues...
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Impressive!
I won't tread on your soil, honest!
This is fantastic! You have quite the imagination. You gave me exactly what I was looking for here. The colors that are brought to life in the images are vibraint and amazing as well. This is a stunning write from start to finish. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep that quill handy dear poet! 
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Wonderful
Very well done. A great poem for the contest. Best of luck in the competition.
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